Template:Did you know nominations/Murray Buchan
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Murray Buchan
- ... that Olympian Murray Buchan originally wanted to work in mountain rescues?
- Reviewed: Put here
Moved to mainspace by Fort esc (talk), Matty.007 (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 18:14, 20 April 2014 (UTC).
Multiple issues. Text is mere 1516 letters. It seems that some info is repeated in article to reach 1500+. I can not find reliable source/citation which prove the info in the hook. If article is copyedited, it may result in a stub having 1000 lettets. Please expand the article and have citation clearly stating the info in hook. Regards and Keep contributing. -Nizil (talk) 16:57, 21 April 2014 (UTC)
- Hook is in [1],
my dad has always been a skier and from a young age worked in the mountain rescue team at Glenshee ski centre, so naturally I wanted to do what my father did
, used as source in article, so no issue there. The lead summarises the article, which is what it is meant to do. Therefore, the information is sourced in the article, then summarised in the lead. Thanks, Matty.007 15:59, 22 April 2014 (UTC)
- Hook is in [1],
- Ok, I found the citation but you cited in article incorrectly. Anyways ::: Murray Buchan (born 2 December 1991), nicknamed Mutley, Muesli, and Muzza, is a freestyle skier who competes in the discipline of halfpipe, his first Olympics was the 2014 Winter Olympics in Sochi.[2]
- Buchan's Olympic debut was at the 2014 Winter Olympics in Sochi, he competed on 18 February 2014 in the halfpipe, a freestyle skiing event, finishing in 17 place in the qualification round.
- This lead speaks of his 2014 Olympic debut twice. And if we remove it. Article falls short of 1500 letters. It is also mentioned twice that he won British Championship. Lead summarizes but in main text. This is mentioned twice. And it looks like If someone copyedits it, it will be even more short. So please add more info rather than stretching what is already there. Regards -Nizil (talk) 19:30, 22 April 2014 (UTC)
Not sure it does repeat about Championships, but working on expanding the article after removing the repeat sentence regarding Olympic debut. Thanks, Matty.007 17:00, 2 May 2014 (UTC)
- And QPQ done at Template:Did you know nominations/Five Days at Memorial. Nizil Shah: attempted fix of issues. Thanks, Matty.007 13:32, 3 May 2014 (UTC)
- Good. Your article needs serious copyediting as it is stretched at some places. But I am afraid that it may result in article falling short of 1500 mark. (Example: His father's occupation was as a member of the Glenshee ski centre mountain rescue team. = His father was a member of Glenshee ski centre mountain rescue team.) Please ask for independent copyediting. Add more information if you find. Regards -Nizil (talk) 17:53, 3 May 2014 (UTC)
- Hey, I requested copyediting help for you at User talk:BDD. Regards -Nizil (talk) 18:13, 3 May 2014 (UTC)
- Good. Your article needs serious copyediting as it is stretched at some places. But I am afraid that it may result in article falling short of 1500 mark. (Example: His father's occupation was as a member of the Glenshee ski centre mountain rescue team. = His father was a member of Glenshee ski centre mountain rescue team.) Please ask for independent copyediting. Add more information if you find. Regards -Nizil (talk) 17:53, 3 May 2014 (UTC)