Talk:Jim Rivaldo

Latest comment: 18 hours ago by AirshipJungleman29 in topic Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 talk 14:09, 3 January 2025 (UTC)Reply

  • Source: [1] Politics was as much a passion as a job for Jim Rivaldo, a veteran San Francisco political consultant who worked campaigns for candidates ranging from Harvey Milk and Ella Hill Hutch to Supervisor Bevin Dufty and District Attorney Kamala Harris.
Moved to mainspace by Vigilantcosmicpenguin (talk). Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 20 past nominations.

— Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧(talk | contribs) 00:48, 9 November 2024 (UTC).Reply

  •   The article is a new creation, and is long enough and adequately source. I did not find any close paraphrasing. However, the provided QPQ is an incomplete review as it was a quickfail that only checked some of the DYK criteria. A full QPQ has to be provided for the nomination to proceed: due to the new rules regarding immediate QPQs, it would be ideal for a full review to be done promptly to replace the provided QPQ.
Among the two hooks, the second hook seems more interesting, especially for non-politics buffs. It is cited inline and verified. However, I do have some reservations regarding the hook, particularly if it might be considered offensive to LGBT readers and editors if the hook as currently written runs. I'm unsure if the hook as currently written is fine, or if will need to be reworded, but for now, my preference would be to go with some variation of it. In addition, other hook suggestions can also be proposed. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 11:12, 10 December 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Narutolovehinata5:I have done a new QPQ: Template:Did you know nominations/Artificial intelligence rhetoric
I had the same concerns as you regarding my hook suggestions, so I will defer to the opinion of the promoter.— Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧(talk | contribs) 20:44, 10 December 2024 (UTC)Reply
I also forgot to mention this in the review, but for DYK purposes, the footnote supporting the quote (the hairdresser one) needs to be repeated immediately after the quote, rather than just after the paragraph. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 06:35, 11 December 2024 (UTC)Reply
Done. — Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧(talk | contribs) 19:41, 11 December 2024 (UTC)Reply
Thank you. To be on the safe side, I would suggest trying alternative wordings for ALT1 that could help make the context of the hook clearer and thus help avoid possible concerns about being offensive (maybe Theleekycauldron can help?), or maybe try additional angles different from the hairdresser one. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 06:59, 13 December 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • @Narutolovehinata5: Alright, how about this version based on the same quote:
  • ALT1b: ... that Jim Rivaldo, a campaign consultant for Harvey Milk, said that moving to San Francisco made him realize "that there were gay lawyers, gay businessmen—a lot of people like me"?
— Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧(talk | contribs) 06:54, 16 December 2024 (UTC)Reply
Feels long. Maybe just drop the mention of Milk? Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 08:46, 16 December 2024 (UTC)Reply
Just noticed this reply. Yeah, I'd be fine with shortening it:
ALT1c: ... that political consultant Jim Rivaldo said that moving to San Francisco made him realize "that there were gay lawyers, gay businessmen—a lot of people like me"?
— Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧(talk | contribs) 03:03, 1 January 2025 (UTC)Reply