Welcome to the Wikipedia Cleanup project. This project is intended as a resource for Wikipedia Cleanup information and discussion. Cleanup issues that this project covers may include, wikification, spelling, grammar, tone, and sourcing.

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--danielsta123Marlith]] ^T/C 22:50, 11 August 2007 (UTC) I shall do copyediting.[reply]
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The Wikipedia Cleanup Legacy List

The manually maintained lists on this page (below) have to an extent been superseded by category lists that are automatically generated from the {{cleanup}} banners placed on articles. See Category:All pages needing cleanup and Category:Cleanup by month.

You may add cleanup requests here as well if you wish (though it is not necessary); see Wikipedia:Cleanup process for further information. Editors are STRONGLY encouraged to try and perform clean-up themselves before posting articles to this list.

Please keep in mind that the lists here constitute only a small fraction of the Wikipedia articles tagged as needing cleanup, and they may not always be maintained as new articles are tagged or old articles are fixed. The list is still active through a number of editors who do still regularly try to attend to this list. Assistance and participation of other editors is welcome.

You may report confusing/messy articles below and explain why they need to be cleaned-up (grammar, spelling, formatting, order, copyright issues, confusion, etc.). Be sure to cross post your entry on the article's own discussion page for the references of other editors who may not visit this page. Please do not add articles below simply because they are POV or are lacking sources. Make sure to sign your additions with the following format: --~~~~.

All users are welcome to help in editing or fixing any page on this list. Please remove any entry from this page after it's fixed (please do not just put a strike through it or leave it on this page), and remember to take the appropriate tag(s) off the page. Editors are encouraged to start with the articles at the bottom of the list first, because they have been listed for the longest period of time (Older cleanup: Category: Cleanup by month).

September 2007

September 8, 2007

Lean Construction Worded like an advertisement. Deals with a specific construction technique by a limited group of firms. Promotes its superiority. Uses extensive external linking directly to for-profit organizations. 4.230.162.237 02:51, 9 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

September 7, 2007

Clinical_depression#Hypomania Urgent attention of an expert ! I (doctor) consider it factually wrong. Anxiety and panic are mostly not part of hypomania. Hypomania belongs to bipolar disorder not unipolar depression. And more and more. Chaotic writen too.--jmak 08:23, 8 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

List of Christian pastors in politics Little more than that - no organisation into groups, regions, no comments on significance etc.

September 2, 2007

Hidden Mickey, This is quite possibly the worst article I ever read. It is filled with trivia, unrefernced things,indeed, but almost half asmush as the other one errors and a informal style. Marlith ^T/C 16:42, 2 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Tomb Raider Level Editor, clogged with non-notable, unverifiable, and non-reliable content, particularly in upcoming levels, weapons, and outfits section. An IMMEDIATE cleanup is the only alternative to a deletion.--WaltCip 21:52, 2 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

September 1, 2007

Moisture absorber - Pooly written (informal style ...), unreferenced. - Mike Rosoft 10:54, 2 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Translation - Has some readability issues. Also seems to be the subject of an editing skirmish between people who are in the field. The result is an article that reads like a textbook and is not very accessible to the non-expert. Man It's So Loud In Here 16:55, 3 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 2007

August 31, 2007

Plan 9 from Outer Space - Plot summary needs some trimming. It's too long. Otherwise good. --Lendorien 20:35, 31 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 28, 2007

Bezant Confusing and internal contradictions.
Center Tagumpay ng Katotohanan (Triumph of Truth) This page has multiple problems. The tone is unencyclopedic, there are several possible copyright violations, the subject is possibly not notable (its diccicult to tell since the article never makes it clear if the subject is a religion or one particular church in that religion). I tried to start cleaning and added some clean up tags but the editor who created the article reverted me.Sbacle 10:45, 29 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 26, 2007

Irish Property Bubble - Terribly formatted and very poor writing and content.Referencing could be fixed up as well. Olockers 10:30, 26 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 25, 2007

Tula massacre - General poor writing, deals with irrelevancies such as how an explicit magazine was sold by minors, claims not entirely supported by the only reference. - Mike Rosoft 16:57, 25 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 24, 2007

Radu Duda, Prince of Hohenzollern-Veringen - Allegations of heavily POV and non-nuetrality. May need copy editing for tone and research to provide better balance. Subject of an edit war. Needs to be reviewed. Please see talk page for more details. --Lendorien 18:41, 24 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 22, 2007

Gelou - a bit more context needed. Sources lacking. --Lendorien 14:51, 22 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Banasthali Vidyapith - Marked as an article which reads like an advertisement. It's based (with apparent permission) off the school's promotional brochure. Needs tone editing, wikification, cropping and possible expansion to include info usually found in university articles. --Lendorien 14:51, 22 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Big Brother Australia series 3 - Needs tone checking and sourcing. --Lendorien 14:51, 22 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Lalitaditya Muktapida - Article is not entirely thematically coherant at the moment. It needs to be reviewed by someone with a background in the subject to straighten things out. --Lendorien 14:51, 22 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Alan Ladd - his filmography is completely unorganised. Reginmund 18:55, 22 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Turned filmography into a list, titles still needs to wikified and the list needs to be pruned from non-notable entries as it is pretty long.--Sus scrofa 00:35, 25 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Ferry Corsten - this is a featured-article calibre dj, but his page seems like it was made either by n00bs or his label. discography is a complete disaster and it lacks focus and background. DJRaveN4x 01:04, 23 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 21, 2007

Silverthorne Mansion - Is copyvio. Proposed deletion --Lendorien 14:15, 21 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Last Words - The article needs to be put into proper sections and some general clean up may also be needed. --Credema 17:57, 21 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 16, 2007

Skype has too much technical detail and computer jargon so consequently does not read well and the product is not explained. The article at the moment would be better placed in a specialist computer magazine.

August 15, 2007

Book 3 (Inheritance trilogy) may need to be updated. I had heard that a release date had been released for the third book. I believe it was set for early March, 2008, unless I heard false information.

August 13, 2007

Thiabendazole has content which looks suspiciously like it was pasted from another website or book. If I am wrong, then references only need to be wikified.70.104.117.178 18:48, 13 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Removed the text dump. Still needs some rewriting to prosify info and also needs sources. --Lendorien 14:30, 21 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Campus SuperStar is too long. Too many information thrown in on the article which are not required. Please post discussion on talk page before any major cleanup is done.Cocoma 22:21, 13 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Project SuperStar is too long. Too many information thrown in on the article which are not required. Cocoma 22:32, 13 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 12, 2007

Rape statistics desperately needs a rewrite. It's currently a POV editorial that rape statistics are unreliable. For example, here's the first sentence: Statistics on rape are among the most unreliable for serious crimes. The article goes on to prove that thesis. See my comments on its discussion page for more details. Guanxi 17:25, 12 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 11, 2007

SmarterChild needs some work. They have a discussion about several things needing cleanup although I am not sure which. There is a cleanup request on the article page. If someone could get anything, it would be great. Complex-Algorithm-Interval 20:25, 11 August 2007 (UTC) I have re-written part of it.Seth J. Frantzman 19:34, 18 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 9, 2007

2 Wheels of Enterprise needs a lot of work. It lacks wikilinking; the section titles do not conform to general practice; the sections are too brief. I don't have time to tackle it, but hopefully somebody can get it into shape. --Moonriddengirl 13:32, 9 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Muhammad Zia-ul-Haq grammar, repeated sentences, sections read like it was written by some teenager unfamiliar with the language. As the general's place in Pakistani history is important, I would like someone with academic knowledge to review, since the article has changed since the last time I read it. Mac

This looks ok now, I have done a little editing and removed some of the bias.--Seth J. Frantzman 13:50, 16 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 8, 2007

Billie Joe Armstrong (Not much cleanup needed) debate on the talk page Talk:Billie Joe Armstrong of his origin someone with a good reference please prove this, issue under 'name' on talk page. The cheese master 06:27, 8 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 7, 2007

Abduction phenomenon is a godawful mess; see Talk:Abduction phenomenon#Numerous massive problems Eleland 04:27, 7 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Jealousy is based upon an inaccurate/limited definition of the word "jealousy." Does not cover any of the other meanings of the word beyond that in a romantic context. Includes poorly organized, non-encylopaedic content. Entire 3rd paragraph is such high-level summary that it reads like a elementary school project - was worse than useless, far below the quality I've come to expect from Wikipedia. Punctuation is poor -I'm sure I could go on, but overall, I felt this was a very disappointing article.

August 6, 2007

Feminism and the Oedipus complex - Messy stylistically; the section on Deutsch reads like it was automatically translated or translated badly, & other sections are haphazard & unclear. All sections need more detail and a generally more thorough, professional treatment to be useful. PoetrixViridis 04:07, 6 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 5, 2007

Emmitt Smith - completely lacking in important career milestones (such as how the Cowboys acquired him), as well as lacking all but the most basic sense of a historic overview (one game is given its own section, the rest of his career is virtually ignored). --Badger Drink 19:43, 5 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Uyghur people - Sloppily written, with poor grammar and illogical constructions; some sections are written in a juvenile tone; many unsupported statements; general pov Bacrito 15:36, 5 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Big Brother (UK) - Article reads like a fan site. Poor grammar, no sources. Just plain low-standards. Dalejenkins | The Apprentice (UK)'s FA plea-please have your say! 18:16, 5 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Had a go at this but it's such a huge subject to cover on one page... Feeelix^Talk!! 12:13, 15 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I had a try at going through bits of the grammar and giving some bits references but it really needs a total rewrite! Groovychick3291 20:18, 19 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 2, 2007

Digital Entertainment Network - Article needs to be broken down, it is currently just a block o text. Grammar needs to be improved. Basically, the whole article needs improvement. --Credema 03:46, 2 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

August 1, 2007

NHibernate - The "Advantages" and "Disadvantages" sections seem like they were written by a programmer whose first language is not English. Arickp 04:14, 1 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I fixed many grammar mistakes but, I lack real knowledge about the subject, so I can't do much more. --Credema 07:25, 7 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 2007

July 29, 2007

Spa bath - article could benefit from some copy editing (grammar, style, further wikification) --Sietse 16:43, 29 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
toadstone - I just fucked this article & since I am a bit at a loss about sex and verification, being new at article-writing, it could probably use some help. Maybe it ought to be combined with the Batrachite page. --Savethesloths 17:49, 29 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 27, 2007

2008 in music - I'd go as far as to say that this article is complete and utter crap. It's filled to the brim with speculation, original research, bad spelling, bad grammar and unencyclopedic wording, as well as being mostly unreferenced. Listing it here in the hope that someone with more patience than I can take a look - I'm very tempted to slash it down to the bone. --Kurt Shaped Box 22:08, 28 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Deathbowl '98 - Written so badly that it's nearly incoherent; completely unreferenced
List of colleges and universities in South Carolina - Alot of wrong information. some public colleges listed as private. Needs cleanup
Sickles High School--Indiscriminately sourced. Some sections need wikifying or possibly removing. Moonriddengirl 19:06, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Haifa - English could be improved, transportation section is too detailed - maybe deserves its own article, academic institution could be better ... etc. --Lendorien 21:10, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Amedeo Guillet needs cleanup by someone familiar with Italian military history. Some text editing, organization and sources needed. --Lendorien 21:10, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Perpetua: An article about an early Christian martyr that mostly just needs some improvements in readability. Sources also needed. --Lendorien 21:10, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Pallava: Organization is poor. English is muddled. There seems to be some original research mixed in there, although that might just be an artifact of poor composition. Probably needs a solid fact-check. Justin Bacon 15:57, 8 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Promotional model NeedsSome text editing, wikifying + sources. --Lendorien 21:10, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 26, 2007

Katiki Point Lighthouse - Written messily and out of order. Reginmund 06:56, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Hollard Group - Has weird links to non-existent article, POV- seems to be a promo taken from the company literature. Frankie816 14:57, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Center for Talented Youth - This is terribly written, it is full of typos and has more fandom than information. It seems like someone wrote the article who did not know how to write, because of that there are no links and bad HTML. Marlith 03:35, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 25, 2007

Direct-to-video - Needs copyediting and sources --Lendorien 13:26, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Brian Keenan (musician) Needs cats, some research and sources. --Lendorien 13:26, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Frame of reference - very long paragraphs, particularly in the lead. Needs fact checking and sources + probably expert attention. --Lendorien 13:26, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
D'ni items Might be redundant with Gateway image or Art (Myst). Many of these Myst articles smack of OR. Has no sourcing either. --Lendorien 13:26, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Nursing Informatics - needs copy editing, sources and probably expert attention. --Lendorien 13:26, 25 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 24, 2007

Kshatriya - needs extensive editing for grammar, to remove redundancy, and generally to make it encyclopedic. -- Whateley23 20:58, 24 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Cave diving - Needs to be completely re-organised. Too much of some info, others are lacking. Lacks proper headings. History section is particularly scrappy (ricjl)

July 20, 2007

Tejano music - Needs repair of many links, and several paragraphs are opinionated talk-page like material. --Whoistheroach 14:40, 20 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 19, 2007

Talking to Dragons - Abnormally massive paragraph with potentially useless information.
Steven Pienaar - Has been playground for vandals. Somebody with knowledge of subject may be needed to verify current version, which needs work even if completely accurate. Moonriddengirl 13:15, 19 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 17, 2007

phantom voltage - Good introduction to this particular term, and is written adequately; however, formatting, citations, and organization need work to be more wiki-ish. Lots of possibly wikify-able terms, aren't. 65.112.197.16 21:23, 17 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Blue Water High - Not too bad in places, but grammar a little iffy here and there - just needs a general going-over. Also a bit disorganised in places - perhaps some new sections needed. TheIslander 11:10, 18 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 15, 2007

Tucker Max - This article has many grammatical errors and is poorly written. The article seems to be biased and makes claims that contradict the sources. 21:47, 15 July 2007 (UTC)
Bassmasters Classic - Lack of third-party sources. Rjgodoy 08:27, 15 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 14, 2007

Nexus:_The_Kingdom_of_the_Winds - This article is poorly organized, badly written, and has a LOT of unnecessary material...lneely42

Deleted a LOT of material from this page following the Wikipedia Video Game Article guideline. Also spent some time rewriting several portions of the article correcting grammar, spelling, and poor writing. Some portions I have decided to leave alone for the time being, especially the Controversy section... I think it could be left, but rewritten to be neutral, as the controversy is an integral part of the game... lneely42 06:18, 14 July 2007 (CST)

Sardar Amir Azam - De-PoV& wikify. Half of article is unsourced. --Lendorien 18:59, 14 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
John Tunnard - apart from needing wikifying, extremely subjective account that looks like original research. Needs sources and rewrite to cull out tone issues that make it read like a college textbook discussion. --Lendorien 18:59, 14 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Stingless bee - Needs sources. --Lendorien 18:59, 14 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 13, 2007

Hip hop & Hip hop music - Both appear to replicate the content of each other. Hip hop music has two styles of referencing, includes a list of sources, and a limited number of Harvard refs. The article is full of opinion, not neutral and very long. Confused re-directs/merger requests. Escaper2007 11:18, 13 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Vasileios Spanoulis - The formatting of this article is very sloppy and the layout makes for a very confusing read, but it has potential given the amount of quality information about this international NBA player compared to many others. MichaelProcton 04:46, 13 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 12, 2007

Hanover Shoe Farms has a cleanup tag on it but I cannot find the reason why on this page. I made recent edits to it to clean it up but I'm not sure if I fixed the problem. COuld somebody give me a hand? I'm new to wikipedia. Barn Cat 18:36, 12 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I will definitely try to help, but most of the help I can offer is to clean up the language. It currently sounds very stilted. Sean Montgomery 14:23, 13 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 11, 2007

Mitotic inhibitor - Recently I have created and expanded the stub 'mitotic inhibitor'. This article is of great importance to cancer treatment and research, but I am very inexperienced in writing for wikipedia and therefore I believe the article needs extensive rewrite, seeing as it does not meet the quality of other wikipedia pages I have seen. I would be grateful if soeone were to help me format the page and expound upon the subject. Dancanm 14:46, 11 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Kentucky-Louisville rivalry - Alot of grammatical errors, along with poor layout and spelling. Kycowboyntv 23:51, 11 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Quarantine - Based on the 1911 Britanica article, this article is out of date, poorly written (with too much emphasis on the 19th century) and needs sourcing. --Lendorien 15:57, 12 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 10, 2007

Strawberry Shortcake-Majority of the article is unsourced and probably contains original research and whatever sources are there are questionable. Storm05 16:12, 10 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Nihonjinron - An article that looks like it's in the middle of major editing but hasn't been edited in almost a month. It has a section named 'Comment to be repositioned' and other stuff that should've been done on the talk page. Haridan 07:04, 10 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Pseudo.com - Notable internet pioneer firm, however page lacks a lead, a lot of the information is in non-encyclopedic form, and the bulk of the people mentioned are red-links. --Cerejota 03:29, 10 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Keith Olbermann - Poorly organized, headings not parallel. Hobo-nc 03:26, 10 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Morchella - Fairly well written, but omits several very important facts: one being that eating the true morel raw will cause serious gastrointestinal distress and the other being that it must not be confused with the toxic False morel. juusan 03:31, 10 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Energizer Bunny - Needs sources. Some prosification. --Lendorien 14:56, 10 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 8, 2007

Non-synchronous transmissions - Article needs serious improvements. It repeats information, it has no illustrations to explain the text, and it is written in an unencyclopedic manner. It also promotes the American Trucker Association, & Professional Truck Driver's Association school at the Houston Community College N.E. campus in northeast Houston, TX (USA)! Why? — CZmarlin 02:26, 9 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Ranger's Apprentice (series) - A large amount of spelling and grammatical errors. Way to many for me to fix on my own. The content at parts can also sound very unprofessional
Bob Clampett - very subjective text in the lower sections - e.g. he wrote some of the 'most outrageuous and funniest cartoons'.
Focus III - this reads like a review, and is incredibly positively biased.
Edith Pringle: Aussie pol activist. Needs sourcing. --Lendorien 16:48, 9 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 7, 2007

Mii (Jungle de Ikou!) - This article is about a cartoon featuring a ten year old girl with large breasts. The writers of this article do not deserve good faith; the depraved tone is hideously unencyclopedic. A gx7 02:49, 7 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Chuck E. Cheese's - a fairly notable chain, that happens to be watchlisted by nearly no one, and also frequented by new and anonymous users. Problem is, Chuck E. Cheese's is a kid's restaurant, and the quality of the article looks like it's greatest fans are the contributors. Please, this is a notable subject, and the article stinks. The Evil Spartan 19:49, 7 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 5, 2007

Fay B. Kaigler Children's Book Festival - Seems to me someone just typed it straight from a book or typed it. Considered deletion tag, but I think it's salvageable. Wikified a bit of it and added categories, but it's massive. Hourick 22:15, 5 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 3, 2007

Akatsuki (Naruto) - A former GA article that was demoted due to too much in-universe material and a large amount of trivia. User:Artist Formerly Known As Whocares 19:40 (Eastern Standard Time), 3 July 2007 (UTC)

July 2, 2007

Shuriken School - It has little information, has no illustrations, and is written in an unencyclopedic manner. It needs some serious improving. Thomas Yen 16:32, 2 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Ranger's Apprentice (series) - A large amount of spelling and grammatical errors. Way to many for me to fix on my own. The content at parts can also sound very unprofessional. Scabloo 04:23, 2 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Politics of Israel - Completely unsourced. Needs verification + fact checking. --Lendorien 16:45, 3 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Knights of the Dinner Table - Character bios could possibly be moved to Characters from Knights of the Dinner Table to make room for info about the publication itself. Also needs sourcing. See talk page. --Lendorien 16:49, 3 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 2007

June 30, 2007

Thousand_island_dressing - The last paragraph under "origins" either needs a rewrite or should be eliminated. It speaks of different types of salad dressings "battling for a place in history," for example. Jkisch 19:27, 30 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Dead Rising - The characters section looks like it was just ripped out of a walk through or game guide.
Matthew the Evangelist - Rife with redundancies and grammatical errors. Is not split into categories, just one big block of text. 65.123.80.28 07:59, 30 June 2007 (UTC)Dafhgadsrhadjtb[reply]
flyforbeans - Needs a total cleanup, and the format to be standardised with other airlines. The information is also a bit vauge. The Gannet 01:08, 30 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 29, 2007

Object composition - A new section about Aggregation in COM was included, which may be confusing or unclear for some readers. Rjgodoy 05:37, 29 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Brave Words & Bloody Knuckles - Non-neutrality, promotional flavour. Excessive editing of this article without explanation has made it hard to trace its roots. An update made June 29 attempted to correct this problem but supporters of the Brave Words marketing team have removed the content (again) Article seems to promote Magazine but when any information is inserted which discusses aspects not in the Magazine's promotional advantage these sections get conveniently removed leaving the article with a Biased or POV feeling. Case in point: Latest edition of magazine is on display in the picture section and data seems to be updated each month. There is excessive use of Weasel words and Peacock language! The accusation that the document is somehow being Vandalized by those of us who claim this is silly... Address the problems with the document and those claiming issues. 64.229.206.12 11:57, 29 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 27, 2007

Infusion - This reads like someone's scrappy cookbook entry rather than an article in an encyclopedia. I have already stripped it of the worst bits. Maikel 10:47, 28 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Valley_High_School_(Des_Moines,_Iowa) - Lots of <br> tags, inconsistent formatting. Bassgoonist 19:24, 27 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Video CD - Large sections contain grammar errors as if parts were machine-translated into English. 67.66.92.222 19:03, 27 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Lawrence Dimick - This article is clumsily written, with halting grammar. The headings make it unclear whether the section "fictional biography" is missing entirely (other than the heading itself) or made up of subsections that merely relate the plot of Reservoir Dogs. The entire article is written with overly basic sentences; this may seem like an odd complaint, but read the article and you'll see what I mean. Minaker 06:38, 27 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Louis Briffa - Unwikified, possibly copied from somewhere. - Mike Rosoft 10:07, 27 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 25, 2007

Amapola Cabase - reads like a promotional, and contains many runon paragraphs with not much sense of order. I also wonder if the subject warrants this much coverage. Squalk25 16:27, 25 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Joe King (guitarist) - Not written in an encyclopedia style.

June 24, 2007

A Yank in the RAF - This article is poorly written and it has only one link to it. Reginmund 22:33, 24 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Operation_Red_Dawn - Photos are all over the place. slightly messy but minor edit could help Tranceduo 23:45, 24 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Help:Merging and moving pages seems to be the place to start. I've never done a merger before myself. I did a look at one of the episode pages, and it seems well-maintained, so you might want to start with a merger proposal as outlined in the "merging & moving pages" section to avoid an edit war. Good luck. :) --Moonriddengirl 17:41, 1 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 23, 2007

Thompson (band) - Doesn't look to be written by native English speaker. Odd grammatical mistakes littered throughout. Also may contain OR and copyright violations. Milton 22:19, 23 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Children's street culture - From the first sentence to the end section is poorly written, with many off topic and lists too long.GreaterWikiholic 04:05, 24 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 22, 2007

Zbigniew Brzezinski - This long article has good content; it needs a serious copyeditor to lift its quality. Lightwiki 23:56, 22 June 2007 (UTC).[reply]
Abdul Baqi Purani - almost unreadable; possibly translated from Pakistani. David Mestel^(Talk) 16:46, 22 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
First-Person Shooter - Most of the article is pretty good, but a few sections need a bit of help. GreaterWikiholic 16:48, 22 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Kumon method - Promotional - Mike Rosoft 17:33, 22 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Gabe Saporta - Unreferenced claims. - Mike Rosoft 17:38, 22 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 21, 2007

Hardware - Only its meaning is displayed and no other infos are available like it's history and types etc.. The information is limited, not very brief. A turn off for Wikipedia. Little teen02 18:38, 21 June 2007 (GMT+8)

June 17, 2007

Chiastic_structure - Needs one or more good examples, attention from an expert. --Biggus Dictus 19:03, 17 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
HSV SS Group A - Needs more wikifying and cleanup from someone who knows his/her cars. Mvuijlst 17:47, 18 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Sinitta - terrible, terrible article......needs a lot of help--Paul75 00:04, 19 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Des'ree - Reads like a press release--Paul75 00:05, 19 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 16, 2007

Civil War (comic book) - The Synopsis section needs cleaning up. It's really long and wordy and disorganized and is just a retelling of it all, and is not encyclopedic. It also needs extensive copyediting. --zandperl 16:47, 16 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
List of Greek companies - loaded with lots of non-notables that need pruning out. Astrovega 00:49, 16 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Allan Snyder - reads like an award citation and needs citations. Bakashi10 06:57, 16 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Kyiv-classic - Contains no references, and appears to have been written by someone involved with the orchestra, but also appears legitimate based upon Google search. -FeralDruid 11:10, 16 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 15, 2007

Yoshi's Story is poorly written with an absoulutely terrible section. GreaterWikiholic 04:30, 15 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Monoboard - Article reads like something made up in school. Cybermuz 16:09, 15 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 14, 2007

First-person shooter engine has a terrible introduction, jargon, lists and is confusing to anyone unfamiliar with the subject. GreaterWikiholic 04:15, 14 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The Hobbit (2009 film) - very choppy and unclear, quite a lot of both grammar and spelling errors.----Browsercat 04:20, 14 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Álvaro de Soto - The coverage of his activity in the Middle East peace process and the "De Soto Report" could be improved. - Mike Rosoft 10:03, 14 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 13, 2007

Qiyamah - Treats the subject as fact, instead of as what it is: a religious belief. Cows fly kites (Aecis) ^Rule^/^{Contributions} 13:20, 13 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Retrotransposon marker - Jargon-heavy. Overall, very choppy writing.--Iknowyourider 15:53, 13 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
DreamStripper - This article sounds like an advertisement and was most probably written by the software's creator. 71.126.181.3 16:22, 13 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 12, 2007

Gene gun - At the very least, the second paragraph of the "Design" section needs a cleanup, possibly a rewrite. --Iknowyourider 20:52, 12 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

TV3 (Catalonia) This entry has been turned into a perfect clone of the TV3 corporate web site. It seems that Wikipedia has chosen to neuter well-documented public criticism concerning the public debates on TV3 (some of it from highly-placed individuals in Catalonia's Parliamentary Control Commission). Furthermore, the entry has been protected from any further editing except by "Andromeda" (the TV corporation's self-appointed publicist).

Violence Against Women Act - I agree with recent posts in talk section that the article need a major revision with an eye toward NPOV. It seems odd to me that the article seems to be almost entirely a criticism of this law. REL1870 21:24, 12 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Photovoltaic_module - Misplaced and unattributed quotations, and no references cited. This article needs some TLC --7secondsed 22:05, 12 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 12, 2007

Ziyarat#India - Section is a mess. Cows fly kites (Aecis) ^Rule^/^{Contributions} 09:57, 12 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 11, 2007

Vittoriale degli Italiani - This is a first article, might overlook some aspects of formatting, style, NPOV, etc. Lebanese blond 19:11, 11 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 10, 2007

Shredderman Rules - Parts of the plot are poorly-written. Groudon199 19:25, 10 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
? & the Mysterians - Article contains lots of minor editing mistakes, but is also written largely in the first-person active voice. --Migozared 03:44, 11 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 9, 2007

Ocean's Thirteen - This article violates NPOV and needs a serious grammar clean up.
Makam Habib Noh - Article reads like a hagiography. A ecis^Brievenbus 14:33, 10 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Jean Houston "Contributions in perspective" section is written like an essay. 24.25.219.142 08:32, 10 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Barrow-in-Furness Badly written and unreferenced with way too much unnecessary information. Poor compared to similar sized UK settlements. Kijog 22:55, 9 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Tholus, Mensa (geology), Rupes, Macula (planetary geology), Linea - short articles about planetary features, originally proposed for deletion after being moved to Wiktionary; I believe that they could be expanded or merged somewhere. - Mike Rosoft 11:59, 9 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The size of Wales - needs to be completely rewritten & retitled to reflect a less UK-centric perspective. --Stlemur 16:16, 9 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Cy Young – formatting problems, grammatical/syntactical errors; also, problems with text: poor transitions and chronologically incorrect. --Ksy92003 (talk) 01:58, 10 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 6, 2007

Star-crossed - Jargon, lists, more about R&J than about the acutal word. GreaterWikiholic 04:45, 6 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Parlour music - Article is completely unsourced. May need text edits. --Lendorien 17:09, 6 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Jarboe - List of albums needs cleanup. Biographical info was cut as copy vio, but a user readded it claiming to be the artist in question's assistant. It IS copy vio fromt he artist's website. Someone with a bit more knowledge of policy needs to take care of this. --Lendorien 16:59, 10 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Grognard - Written more like an entymological dictionary entry, needs sections and poorly written.GreaterWikiholic 22:04, 6 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The Great Doheny - Written in an uncyclopedic style.Crazyvideomaniac 22:10, 6 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Sipa and Sipa (disambiguation). Info all over the place there. —mattrobs 10:55, 6 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 5, 2007

Sandy Cheeks - Primarily is written in an in-universe perspective and contains no citations at all. Pants^(T) 21:18, 5 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Antitrust - "History of antitrust in the United States" section reads as biased, selective, and overly authorial. Needs editing, citations, and general clean-up. This is a major article.--72.43.165.29 20:09, 5 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
DuckTales - Contains no citations whatsoever.--Astrovega 14:27, 5 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
SWAT Kats - No citations.--Astrovega 14:29, 5 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Iraq - There are several grammar issues in the first paragraph and beyond. I think this should be considered a major article, and should present itself formally.--Daltonator 02:06, 6 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 3, 2007

Yeoman - No intro, dictionary like sections, written poorly, could be shortened. Seems more like what you'll find in an entymology dictionary than an encyloclopedia. GreaterWikiholic 00:05, 5 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Korfball European Bowl - It's written in poor English. Katharineamy 17:12, 3 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
GCSE Astronomy - There are grammatical mistakes and the language does not suit an encyclopedia article. Please fix.Wiki.user 11:43, 3 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 2, 2007

Jean-Hippolyte Flandrin - It was taken pretty much word for word from the Eleventh edition of the Encyclopædia Britannica, which was published in 1911 (it has since entered the public domain). I understand this edition Encyclopædia is frequently used as a resource, but the style of writing is outdated and is not consistent with the rest of Wikipedia. Even though it appears there have been some changes in the past to make it sound more up-to-date, the content of the article still sounds rather archaic. The article might also need the attention of someone who knows a bit about the artist. --Neinfraulein 03:28, 3 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- I updated the tone of the article, but I'm not much of an art buff. It's probably fine the way it is, but if someone's into art it could use his or her expertise. ryright 04:54, 11 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Lauren London - The article already has an Unreferenced tag, but could also benefit from a general cleaning up of the Early Life and Career section. Arrow 00:28, 3 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

June 1, 2007

Santa Sangre - Tone not encyclopedic--PhageRules1 20:47, 1 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I fixed most of the grammar and added a spoiler warning, but the article is still very lacking, especially in sources. JoeyETS 00:57, 2 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Palo Verde Nuclear Generating Station - "Safety Concerns" section has a non-working link. Most of the "History" section is uncited, with the only reference to an ISBN number. 69.125.123.179 12:16, 2 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 2007

May 31, 2007

Schools of the Sacred Heart poorly written and short. GreaterWikiholic 18:58, 31 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Tom Natsworthy - Had a complete rewrite by me but i need someone who knows more to help-needs lots of content addition.--Camelcast 09:14, 31 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Razorback - lots of fantastic claims here. Are any of them true? --Rebent 06:29, 31 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Article reads well enough to me. Issue seems to be lack of references, not messiness. Matt 19:35, 29 June 2007 (UTC).

Silver Nanoparticles - Incomplete and confusing article. Needs to be expanded and clarified --Ninjatacoshell 18:23, 31 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Pre-qualification. Some of the information is incorrect, specifically regarding the social security number not being needed. That is absolutely incorrect.

May 30, 2007

European Irish - Legitimate topic, but seems to have been created as an advertisement for the europeanirish.com website. - Mike Rosoft 13:45, 30 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May, 29, 2007

Luya District – machine translated from es:Distrito de Luya and therefore rather incomprehensible. A more extensive article is found at de:Distrikt Luya (Luya). --Lambiam ^Talk 06:39, 29 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 26, 2007

Hells Angels is really poorly written, controversy aside. There are all sorts of grammatical errors and odd syntaxes. I'd be bold, but I don't know enough abuot the subject to figure out what some of the article is trying to say --xAlpha 23:00, 26 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Maybe a "subject matter expert"? What subject would that be? It may just need to be re-written - both the article and talk are a bit out of control.Lightwiki 01:53, 23 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Timebase correction repeats a lot of the same information and is poorly organized.
Multimedia Fusion has mostly bad English grammar, there are misspelled words, and it just doesn't look gay.

Cleaned up formatting and grammer a bit. Program functionality needs verified. --Mortal 23:57, 30 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

iNiS is poorly written, short and has broken links. Hard to read. Needs to look encyclopedic. GreaterWikiholic 02:17, 28 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 25, 2007

James W. Holsinger - this bio for US surgeon general nominee needs the attention of an experienced wikipedia biographer --SVTCobra 01:19, 26 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Warriors_(novel_series) - Simply very messy, unprofessional, and biased--Lefteh 01:05, 26 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Very fan focused - unencyclopedic character. :: Kevinalewis : ^{(Talk Page)}/_(Desk) 13:34, 25 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Plese Protect Rodeo, Circus, and other related articles? Mostly because animal right activists are vandalizing them.--Hailey 20:32, 25 May 2007 (UTC)
Sheikh Khalifa Bin Zayed Bangladesh Islamia School and College , Abu Dhabi No reliable sources apart from the main website. Much of the article reads like prose or an essay. I'm not sure if this is canon for an encyclopedia.
Alfonso Ribeiro Trivia section needs to be integrated into article or removed. GrooveDog 12:22, 26 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 24, 2007

Royal visits to Australia contains incorrect links and confusing third person pronouns such as a he which can refer to a few people. It's also a long article requiring organization.

I added sections and an area for references, however, I haven't read through or improved the content at all. -Sparky 11:03, 12 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Town School, San Francisco. Reads poorly, short, mission statement uncyclopedic, it is a stub.GreaterWikiholic 04:47, 24 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Briarpatch. Looks like bits have been cut out. Beyond that, general lack of NPOV, unencyclopedic tone, and, frankly, patent nonsense. --Hiddekel 22:23, 24 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 23, 2007

Sacramento High School contains unencyclopedic lists that may require cleanup.Rjgodoy 07:31, 23 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Simon Necronomicon Tone changes between it being an ancient book translated in the 1970s, a book written on it's own merits in the 1970s, and a hoax version of the Lovecraft Necronomicon written in the 1970s. I thought I could possibly fix it, but it's just too much. Might even want to just delete the nonsense and add it as a footnote to the Necronomicon page. 69.64.10.249 14:01, 23 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Filippino Lippi: (Renaissance painter) - I'm still relatively new at all this, but it seems to me that this article is completely lacking in references. I would tag it, but am still uncomfortable with taking such liberties. There also seems to me some NPOV violations, given a lack of critical reference in such sentences as this, "His first works greatly resemble those of Botticelli's, but with less sensitivity and subtlety" and "Eventually Lippi's style evolved into a more personal and effective one...." I hope a more experienced editor might have time to take a look and decide if those issues need tagging. --Moonriddengirl 14:12, 3 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Tagged for tone, cleanup and sources --Lendorien 20:46, 23 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 22, 2007

KZ 7 - Needs linking. Rjgodoy 05:20, 22 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Crucifixion eclipse - Very long, POV --68.236.38.90 06:00, 22 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Pontarlier - The history bit about aviation seems almost like an auto-translation. Badly written. --Frokor 16:12, 22 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

-Cleaned up the grammar a little but still some incoherent phrases that I didn't get.jtimshel 20:34, 30 July 2007

May 21, 2007

Sahaj Marg - Incorrect citations, sources cited often don't say what it is claimed they say, incorrectly wikified, the word "cult" is used over and over again, POV challenges, one editors interpretations keep sneaking into the article. Sethie 19:42, 21 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Shekhar Suman - Unwikified, with too many POVs and/or may be inaccurate content too. Quork 14:30, 21 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 18, 2007

Sam & Dave - In dire need of help. POV, colloquial writing, poor formatting, makes no attempt to follow standards. --FuriousFreddy 23:54, 20 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Canvey Island - Reads like a travel guide. A ecis^Brievenbus 23:29, 19 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Sasha and Zamani - Improper citation, conflicting information, poorly written. -Lott 09:08, 18 May 2007 (UTC)
Yonatan Netanyahu - much of the page is bullet points instead of prose. 129.31.72.52 14:37, 18 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Pinta - Poorly written, no organisation, citation, internal links, or formatting.Celtic Emperor 15:44, 18 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Smooth jazz - Numerous Wikipedia policy concerns, including WP:RS, WP:V and in turn WP:N as well as WP:NPOV, WP:NOR, WP:NOT#DIR and WP:EL. The article though is about a major jazz genre with worldwide radio coverage, and so is notable and in my view, not eligible for AfD, but notability isn't established in the article due to no citations or references. Also alerted to cleanup taskforce, where detailed information on the articles problems are here: Wikipedia:Cleanup Taskforce/Smooth jazz. --tgheretford (talk) 16:10, 18 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Annitya - Unwikified, poorly referenced, appears to consist of religious claims stated as a fact. - Mike Rosoft 20:44, 18 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 17, 2007

Richard McKeon - There are no citations, and the article is not well written, especially the end.
Gaby Hoffmann - The article is incredibly confusing, digressing wildly. - Echtoran ^(talk) 10:52, 17 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
History of Portugal (1419-1499) - a fabulous encyclopedic article, but its language is poor - it reads like it was translated from another language. AllGloryToTheHypnotoad 01:16, 18 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 15, 2007

Tonya Kay - article reads like a resume or a press release, has an overly detailed list of articles and appearances. Blade 05:54, 16 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Alternative hip hop - Supplies little fact and much opinion and while it cites its sources for this information, it doesn't read like an encyclopedia entry at all. Does not go into great detail regarding examples, history, etc.
Blue Lagoon Island - Unreferenced; unencyclopedic pronouncements. - Mike Rosoft 19:19, 15 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Dolphin Encounters - Advertisement, connected to the above. - Mike Rosoft 12:45, 16 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Lan Mandragoran - Article on a character from The Wheel of Time - the page was really disorganized so I grouped topics, but within each topic the text needs to be changed to flow better. --zandperl 20:37, 15 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 14, 2007

List of songs in The O.C. Please cleanup to notable songs only. Tonytypoon 23:11, 14 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 13, 2007

The Buckaroos - notable band, but the content seems to be too much promotional. - Mike Rosoft 08:22, 13 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I did some serious restructuring and removed a lot of promo material. Have tagged for WP:LoCE to have a look at. Cricketgirl 18:55, 13 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kip Siegel - notable physicist. Anon user data dumped a hige amount of text, without references.—Gaff ^ταλκ 10:12, 13 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
NESCafe - I tried cleaning this up, but it obviously needs a bit of work. --ApolloBoy 21:42, 13 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
TeleForm - I nominated this for deletion as advertising, but it appears to be notable; needs a complete rewrite though. EliminatorJR ^Talk 23:31, 13 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 9, 2007

Evaluation - grammar and formatting both need cleaning up a bit. Some clunky and sweeping statements need tidying up too. Rob 15:04, 9 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Contributions by John leo (talk · contribs) - most pages created by the user need cleanup, possibly merging and/or renaming. - Mike Rosoft 11:29, 9 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Bobobo-bo Bo-bobo and Bobobo-bo Bo-bobo (character) - These articles are in desperate need of cleanup and I refuse to be the one to do it (I don't have the time nor the patience to handle such jobs). I suggest more than one person tackles these articles (I'm sure the other Bobobo articles need cleanup too) to avoid going insane. // DecaimientoPoético 00:33, 10 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 7, 2007

Tat Tvam Asi - The article sounds too religious and needs a bit of de-biasing. Willie the Walrein-^{talk to me} 16:45, 7 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
VATSIM - Information is not up to date, needs a review Enti342 09:25, 8 May 2007 (EST)

May 5, 2007

Logical_framework_approach - Formating shabby, hard to read, requires general tidying Onetwothreesix 19:33, 5 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Culture#Belief_systems - There's no theme here, making the section disorganized. It covers differences between Eastern and Western culture; Abrahamic religion, Eastern religion and philosophy, folk religion, the American Dream, and marriage. Why this grab bag of topics? -Kris Schnee 05:51, 5 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
John Mensah - POV fancruft. A ecis^Brievenbus 00:08, 6 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 3, 2007

Floating timeline - A fair bit of information their, but it needs to be more organized and presented in a clearer way. -Kraw Night 06:15, 4 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

May 2, 2007

Sean Avery - Starts to get choppy and seems be more of a day-to-day type article after that adding many things with no relevance at all and is also missing citations for a majority of the article. May be written like a fan-site, in some areas, as well, but I am not sure abudabee.

May 1, 2007

Sun Yingjie - Just one big block, needs more organization. --Tyler Gothier 02:26, 2 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Significantly improved. Still may need tonal editing, some wikilinks and definately needs sourcing. --Lendorien 14:43, 22 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 2007

April 26 - 30, 2007

Corporation (university) needs a lot of work to get up to standard 130.126.196.123 00:07, 1 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
List of high schools in Indiana Inconsistent honorifics.--Bedford 03:43, 30 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Bobby Darin article style needs cleaning. There are many redundancies and the language is too informal.
Eyes Wide Open - Lacks proper sources outside of the project's own page. Makes the whole thing look and read like advertising for this particular project. -- 71.246.235.137 19:55, 28 April 2007 (UTC) & Lendorien 20:33, 4 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Nicky Wu - Reads like a record company promo. A ecis^Brievenbus 01:09, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Did some stuff. Still needs referencing. Filmography needs roles filled in. -- Shoejar^talk/edits 02:50, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Cambridge Centre- I tagged this article since some users see that this article should be deleted. Rather than deleting the whole article, it should be cleaned up and expanded. Sasquatch4510 12:52, 26 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 25, 2007

Dumarsais Simeus - There is a great to-do list on the talk page. Nswinton 21:09, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Ballachulish - Needs serious wikification. Lots of dead links. Nswinton 21:35, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Eternit - unreferenced stub Nswinton 21:09, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Freddy's Dead: The Final Nightmare - Plot summary could afford to be re-written in less of a junior high tone. Others sections could use expansion. Nswinton 21:09, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Symposium (Plato dialogue) - Has been greatly improved, but needs some knowledgeable editor's polish. Nswinton 21:35, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I tried to improve the formatting, but the sidebars are just too big! Kweeket 07:20, 27 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

What exactly is the problem with the sidebars? Or has it been fixed? --Burger ca t 18:25, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Reduced thumbnail size. That might fix it, it looked fine on my browser though. --Burger ca t 02:46, 12 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kurdish calendar - Messy, grammar errors, and probably inaccurate information.
Roman Ungern von Sternberg the article doesn't site a single reference or source. Definitely needs a clean up. Olockers 19:35, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Politics of Ethiopia - Most of what is said in the chapter "Political developments" is also said in the chapter "Current politics." This needs to be sorted, probably by merging the two sections. A ecis^Brievenbus 22:36, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 24, 2007

Nexus:_The_Kingdom_of_the_Winds - This article is full of inaccuracies, spelling and grammar errors. The users who frequent the talk page can't decide on whether or not to keep the section about corrupt administrators in the game. INBN 23:48, 24 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Cleaned up some spelling and grammar errors. --Burger ca t 10:46, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Harlem Renaissance - Someone has edited this page as a joke or on accident..I don't know. I am currently writing a speech on this topic and well, they put profanity in it. And I just wanted to bring that your attention. --207.75.214.177 18:49, 24 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Well, vandelism isn't all. The introduction for this article is longer than the main body text. It rambles and lacks direction and any sourcing. It probably needs to be moved to somewhere else int he article. A former Featured Article candidate, it seems to have significantly degraded.--Lendorien 15:04, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Oh... my... god... This article desperately needs cleaning up. I have done a few basic things, but I could do with some help. Both because African-American culture is not my area of expertise, and because it's almost bedtime in this part of the world. Thank you very much for bringing this to our attention, 207.75.214.177. A ecis^Brievenbus 22:44, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

this diff is the article roughly when it was put up as a FAC; it was much better then than it is now. -- phoebe/(talk) 07:41, 25 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Cal Madow – probably relevant, but currently a SPAM and POV page. Béka 22:06, 24 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like it may contain copy vio. NOT --Lendorien 15:34, 25 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Mauro Campagnoli - Badly written. Very vague on his background and qualifications. Someone who knows italian and English would be of great help in clarifying this bio.--LC | Talk 22:59, 24 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Podiatry - The sections on podiatry/chiropody by country need to be wikified, there are some OR issues, and the difference/similarity between podiatry and chiropody need to be made clear. Cows fly kites (Aecis) ^Rule^/^{Contributions} 12:30, 24 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 23, 2007

Trzciniec culture - Written in broken English. A ecis^Brievenbus 10:37, 23 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 22, 2007

Ludovico technique#In popular culture Poor grammar, kind of messy. Stuff like that. --Matthew Proctor 23:18, 22 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Human rib cage#Rib anatomy All the atypical ribs are listed as typical. "Typical ribs" has a single subsection that begins with a list. The end of the section has 2nd-persion instructions on CPR. --Beveal 00:18, 23 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 21, 2007

David Twersky could definitely use a cleanup. It is quite POV from what I can tell and lacks a seriousness required for such an article. It reads almost like an advertisement. I'm sure New Square could use a bit of a cleanup too.Olockers 11:30, 22 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 20, 2007

Ransom_of_King_John_II_of_France - This is a real mess currently; it looks like a student's essay pasted in here --BlackTerror 20:01, 20 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
James Giles - The last paragraph especially seems POV. --BlackTerror 20:46, 20 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
John Drury is also a poet. I think they're two different people.
Kasumi Tendo terribly wordy, and overwritten. Mostly the work of one individual contributor, but it needs to be NPOV cleared. President David Palmer 06:27, 21 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Nabiki Tendo same as the above. President David Palmer 06:27, 21 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 19, 2007

Tony Romo - 2006 Season written very sloppily--Cdman882 04:02, 20 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Cleaned it up a bit - 27 May 2007.

Annobón - section on Fauna and Flora has been written very badly. Needs rewriting, prefereably by someone who understands the subject. also this contains profanityBazonka 16:04, 19 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
France Gall - errors in grammar, non-NPOV statements, inappropriate tone at times, confusingly structured, unverified statements. -Spikedcandy 16:33, 19 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Have had a go at a major edit of this page, moving around sections as suggested on the Talk page and rewriting poor grammar or poorly written sections.Faubourgienne 16:57, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 18, 2007

Anathema - Sections repeat material, some material (pop culture) seems of nonencyclopedic nature. → Aethralis 18:00, 18 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Motor oil - This article needs help with basic grammar, spelling, proper headings, and encyclopedic tone. Charles Gaudette 10:30, 18 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I have corrected the tense (and other things), but the name issue should still be discussed. Alekjds ^talk 23:03, 18 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 17, 2007

Colin Calderwood - Second time I have flagged this - subjective and badly written - sounds like a bad tabloid article - anyone??Sixfields 20:37, 17 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Big Bureau Creek Seems like a lot of stuff is just made up. Nothing is sourced, lots of pictures of a group of friends hanging out. Just seems ridiculous at times --Schanker21 16:37, 17 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Desposyni Article has quotations from primary sources but few secondary sources and references. Most of the content seems to be copied verbatim from a religious group's website. Ovadyah 23:22, 21 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 16, 2007

Moisture advection - Good Number of Problems. Could still use some work --The Random Edit or 23:49, 16 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Yamaha XTZ 750 - Big mess and hard to comprehend. A lot of grammar issues. --KBi 05:41, 16 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I had a go at this, but it still needs a lot of work and a fresh pair of eyes. It looks to me like the initial work was done by an automatic internet translator, so there may be a copyright issue somewhere here...Lorangriel 15:29, 17 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Done a little more, but I'm pretty much stuck. I know nothing about this! Feeelix^Talk!! 12:18, 15 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 15, 2007

Channel 4 programming is a new article that combines material lifted from Channel 4 (which was becoming too big) and material merged from the former List of Channel 4 television programmes. It is divided into genres of programming some of which are highly specific with others being vague and mixed-up. It also contains content from many different editors, describing specific programmes individually, which tends to make the prose seem very disjointed. It generally needs a tidier structure, but given the amount of content, is a pretty big endeavour. It is also separately tagged as requiring references. -- Fursday 00:02, 15 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 14, 2007

Emil Krebs - Wall of text that appears to have been translated. Alksub 21:57, 14 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, it appears to have been computer-translated from the German WP article.[1 Schmitty120 14:32, 15 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Supernatural - This is an important article, but unfortunately it contains many forward claims that require attribution to reliable sources, chief among them a strong support of methodological naturalism in science. It lacks references for many of its other claims, which I have marked with "citation needed" tags. It uses numerous weasel words. "Competing Explanations and Criteria of Preference" as well as the end of "Alleged instances of supernaturalization" have a naturalistic POV and should be cut down unless reliable sources can be found to support their statements. See what I wrote under "Unsourced." Good day.Schmitty120 19:35, 14 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 13, 2007

Lichen sclerosus et atrophicus - does not fit the format of a proper medical ailment article. See Tuberculosis for an example of a proper one. This should be a fairly easy fix as the article is not that long. --Lendorien 13:38, 13 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Model 1888 Commission Rifle - no sources, no sections, and some information is repeated three times throughout the text. Maybe it should also be moved to Gewehr 88, in line with how Gewehr 98 and Karabiner 98k is named. --Sus scrofa 20:48, 13 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 12, 2007

James_Coonan - A rambling, unfocused narrative that digresses into a fairly interesting but inappropriate story. Even when it's topical, the writing is difficult to follow.--128.186.153.249 20:46, 12 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I have done a complete revision of the text in this article, cut out some of the rambling content. Some content moved to talk page pending sourcing. Desperately needs citations and examination by an expert. --Lendorien 20:20, 1 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 11, 2007

Zakir Hussain (musician) - Highly repetitive. Poor formatting.

I removed the redundant information...and there was lot of that. Kweeket 23:00, 14 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 10, 2007

Los Angeles Southwest College - This article reads like a recruitment pamphlet. I think it has some good information but needs to be made a little more NPOV and less shiny. If that makes sense. I added the {{Advert}} template. —BassBone (my talk · my contributions) 07:57, 10 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Libri Prohibiti - Needs to be wikified, have Czech-language names etc. corrected (diacritics), and also restructured - perhaps trimmed a bit. - Mike Rosoft 17:02, 10 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 9, 2007

North-West Frontier Province - The geography section reads like a travel ad, while the history section contains a copypasted lecture. I couldn't retrieve where the lecture ends and the proper article continues. A ecis^Brievenbus 22:55, 9 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 8, 2007

Australian Survivor - Overlong and filled with trivia and POV comments. --Nick Dowling 01:58, 8 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Kurali - The long paragraph is makes sense at first but then seems poorly thrown together.KBi 09:30, 8 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Rudolf Bahro - Large blocks of text, masses of data thrown into an article. --themcman1 13:58, 8 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 7, 2007

List of characters in Ed, Edd n Eddy - The article cannot differentiate between fact and fiction. The only part of the article that does this is the lead. Needs to be rewritten to conform with WP:WAF. Squirepants101 20:03, 7 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Template:R_with_possibilities -- Wording is difficult to understand; writing style does not match other Wikipedia messages. I know this isn't the Simple English version of Wikipedia, but this Template is really confusing. --hadley 15:33, 6 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Confessions_of_a_Teenage_Drama_Queen - stumbled on the site as suggested by SuggestBot for it being a stub, but turns out the plot section is one run-on sentence followed by another. EvokeNZ 06:40, 7 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I did what I could for the poor thing. --The Streetsweeper 08:42, 8 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Quality control - completely uncited, seems like the bulk of the history is OR/speculation. style issues. over half the text is on quality assurance, which has its own article. (though there is a merge discussion on the two). Ripe 15:48, 7 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

April 5, 2007

Strategic planning - Needs general cleanup and removal of bias. Has formatting issues throughout, and questionable quality as well. -- Whereizben - Chat with me - My Contributions 12:54, 5 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
ZZZap! - Suffers from poorly constructed sentences and dodgy English. Needs some revising for grammar. Content is overly long and covoluted. The As it is, the article is fairly unreadable and massive. I did a little editing, but I'm not really familiar with the show, being American and all.. --Lendorien 22:15, 5 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Route poisoning - Confusing at best - inaccurate at worst. I don't know enough to fix myself, but I know that the author is confusing route poisoning and poison reverse. Someone with expert networking knowledge needs to go over this. 68.85.119.250 22:46, 5 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Dragon Master - Needs wikification, npov, and a rewrite. Metrackle 21:51, 5 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

March 2007

March 26-30, 2007

History of the Green Party of Canada - Introduction needs to be written, source need cleaning up. GreenJoe 19:33, 30 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Sidux - Seems to require cleanup to meet Wikipedia's quality standards. I have made a few changes, please check and correct it. --77.181.131.58 11:49, 29 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I took a jab at it. A lot of the work simply required naturalization of the English grammer, so that's done. I can't say anything about the informational content itself. Still needs sourcing. --Lendorien 17:26, 2 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Rock the Vote - Much of the article is straight copy-paste, tenses are mixed, and sections need to be added. -- Xenoveritas 15:41, 29 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Conservatism in Canada - General cleanup in several areas, including factual accuracy, citations, clarity and organization. Hipsterlady 21:47, 27 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Neoconservatism in Canada - This article does not adequately cite its references or sources.Hipsterlady 21:47, 27 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Tiësto - Career section begins well but ends up in a mere listing of sometimes irrelevant events. Furthermore, the end of the section looks really messy. --Ionstorm 17:53, 26 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Fender_Stratocaster - Article begins well but loses organization and the running order jumps around. D. Miller

March 23, 2007

Dolphins-Jets rivalry - Lots of information (perhaps too much), but unencyclopedic tone throughout much of the article; too much for me to rewrite on my own. Could use some copyediting too, perhaps. -- Highway99 06:30, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
List of Dutch hip hop musicians - Needs wikification, npov'ing, etc. A ecis^Brievenbus 17:15, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Did some cleanup here, mostly needs sources and organization now. General cleanup would still help. Nswinton 19:53, 12 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Cleaned up somewhat, but may need additional changes. --DSPoh 13:33, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Ronson's Lighters - Not much content; loosely organized. I did a bit of copyediting, but this article needs to be revised and expanded. --DoorsAjar 08:41, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
USA PATRIOT Act - It's hard to find information in it.
Ribesal - Real topic, but extremely badly written, unreferenced, and unwikified. -- Mike Rosoft 22:12, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

March 19, 2007

Environmental issues in Ethiopia - Good info, but sounds like it's written by a non-native speaker, lots of redundancies and some grammar/spelling errors

I cleaned up the sentence structure, spelling and grammar issues for the most part. -- Nswinton 17:03, 21 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Dronfield - This article has been subject to many small, unstructured additions producing an incoherent and somewhat unintelligible read. The information in the main body is delivered in a short and almost truncated manner for the most part, explicating very little as the topics progress. Secondly, half of the text under “History” relates very loosely to history; distinct sections relating explicitly to their own content may solve this. -- Naqahdah 14:08, 19 March 2007 (UTC)Naqahdah[reply]

March 18, 2007

Olivia_(singer) - Proofreading for typos and general cleanup required, e.g. same facts are stated multiple times in several locations (bio, music career)
Erotic Lactation - Article needs general proofreading. Spelling errors, non-words, and some colloquial speech detracting from encyclopedic tone.

This still needs more editing. I attempted to make spelling/grammar changes, but short on time and unable to finish it now. I cannot in good conscience recommend leaving the bit about lesbians breastfeeding each other being commonplace. The citation for that bit was dated to 1934: too old for anything current and scholarly. I left it there, though. Snackar 09:46, 18 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Sutton High Sports College - This article needs proofreading, verified sources and generally, a more encyclopedic tone. --EscapingLife 21:48, 18 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

March 17, 2007

Noelle Pikus Pace - This article is poorly written and from a first person perspective. The person is real and seems notable but the text of the article needs much attention. Sadly more than I hace this morning. JBEvans 10:55, 18 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Social studies - This article needs clean-up, streamlining or a complete rewrite and/or a possible merge? I tried some by correcting spelling but I do not have enough time, interest nor experience to format the layout and content. Also not sure about the validity/nobility of the subject, as it seems to be some sort of set of study hints for students; therefore un-encyclopedic? I also tried to make the layout look a bit better, it's better looking but still is a poor article in my opinion. Hopefully someone will look at this to help clean it up, expand it, merge it, or delete it. I did add a stub tag. Dunno :/ -Jeeny 19:01, 17 March 2007 (UTC)

I tried to break up the material in the introduction into subsections as well as removing some redundancy and confusing sentence structure. I also rephrased the Digital Technology section to be easier to understand and to sound less like a commercial. I don't know enough about the teaching methods to know what to do with them, but I recommend perhaps just creating a new page or linking to an existing one that covers the method of teaching. The current lists are not very informative and seem more like a brochure than an encyclopedia entry. SPH. 17, March 2007.

General Hospital - This article is in need of some basic cleanup and reformatting. If left untended, it will essentially turn into a recap/fansite page. I don't have a problem with posting storyline-type information, but it needs to be brought up to WP Quality standards. Also, fans keep adding new couple and supercouple pages for practically every set of characters, most of which is in blatant violation of WP:NOR. I would think most of the "couple" pages are good candidates for deletion. A few, like Luke and Laura Spencer are definitely Notable for their contribution to the modern Soap Opera, but most are frivolous and unnecessary.--66.91.225.99 02:34, 18 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

March 16, 2007

Rachel Stevens - The article seems to have too many sections, and become very messy and untidy to look at. Blacksilkandy 22:05, 16 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Spread of Islam - This article has a few passages with clearly biased points of view and should be written much more neutrally. Examples of quotes include "The infamous Hakim (Al-Hakim bi-amr-Allah, the sixth Egyptian Caliph, 996-1021, who became the god of the Druze) determined to destroy the Holy Sepulchre (In 1010.)" Infamus? God of the Druze? What?

"Yet, in spite of all, Christianity failed, and Islam succeeded in gaining the Iranian race." I think there is a much better way of saying that. --213.174.190.59 17:00, 16 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Attempted to fix some of the biased phrasing. Still needs some work. --Drsexlove 16:00, 3 June, 2007 (UTC)

March 14, 2007

Library - Could probably be divided up into several articles: one section has a request for development. -- Jackiespeel 19:09, 12 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Sri - The article is just totally misformatted and repeats paragraph, spacing is all wrong. The whole thing is royally screwed up.

Cleaned it up some. Still needs work. RichM90071 01:34, 18 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Jared Ingersoll - All the information is there, the page needs formatting work, wikification and sources.
Sunflower_oil - Is nearly an advertisement. No NPOV, and no hear-say claims.

I did fix the overzealous capitalization. -- Sci girl 04 May 2007

Rancho San Joaquin Middle School - Seems a little one-sided, don't you think. It is only talking about one humanities teacher, Kay Gee, there are other humanities teachers and other teachers there who deserve to have their name on their as well, not just her. Please do something about it, I didn't want to touch it, but I might fix it a bit... just a bit.
Shorts - The section 'Motivation' is poorly worded. -- Bitbut 01:46, 13 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I tried to clean it up a bit and reword it. More than just the Motivation section needs work. --Joanna 03:09, 16 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I agree, but that's not the half of it. For a start, it seems to be written, without realising it, from an entirely monocultural (North American) point of view, but this is a subject on which attitudes and practice vary a lot even within the English-speaking world, never mind everywhere else. There are also a lot of terminological and definition problems. Unfortunately I know a lot about this subject, so I suppose I shall have to get down to work on it. Woblosch 22:35, 21 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Shady Side Academy - May read too much like a promotional. -- Mike Rosoft 13:56, 15 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Innovation Relay Centre Network - Reads like promotional, but perhaps it can be salvaged. - Mike Rosoft 19:33, 15 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

March 8-11, 2007

Intermolecular force - Citations need to be added.
Gaffney High School - A user has put a large amount of unformatted text in the article, and asked me not to revert it. Could somebody make heads or tails of it? - Mike Rosoft 18:26, 10 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The broken formatting has been fixed, but I still think there's too much (not particularly encyclopedic) content. - Mike Rosoft 14:08, 11 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Varalaru - History of Godfather - Many grammatical and clarity errors. Much of the content essential to a good article on a film is there, but it is also confusing to read. Most of the spelling errors have been addressed, but the original author(s) may not be familiar enough with English (no criticism intended). A good copy editor is essential, and familiarity with the film may be beneficial. The article will benefit from much paring of excessive detail, and significant citing. Also, many, many incidences of what appears to be original research, or at least, personal interpretation. :— Jim Dunning talk : 03:30, 9 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

March 7, 2007

Country pop - No sources, informal and awkward style (incl. unnecessarily long, if not run-on, sentences), poor grammar.
National Monument (Ireland) - Just plain confusing
- Cleanup and confusion tags added. TenPoundHammer 22:51, 30 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The Woods Hole, Martha's Vineyard and Nantucket Steamship Authority - This article is organized poorly.
Privatization - Most of this article suffers from a total lack of sources. Furthermore, it has relatively little information on its actual subject; actual facts about privatization are overwhelmed by information about arguments pro and con. Even discussions of actual privatizations tend to overemphasize information about the arguments surrounding it relative to other facts, which is a serious information bias. Elliotreed 19:35, 7 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

March 6, 2007

British African-Caribbean community - Is supposed to be about the African and Caribbean communities in Britain but instead is completely about the Caribbean, please clean it up. I already tried but somebody changed it back.

I think you're misunderstanding the term 'African-Caribbean'; think of it like 'African-American', ie Caribbean citizens of African descent (not Caribbean citizens and African citizens). Hope that helps. Jonathanmills 20:33, 7 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

American Pie - Has words run together, misspellings of McLean's name, and far too many other errors and REALLY needs a good cleanup by someone with good grammar.
Praieira revolt - This article needs cleanup. Needs more context and details. It's badly in need of sourcing and a general reorginaziation of the info. It reads like a philisophical essay rather than an article and is light on any real meat. --Lendorien 00:57, 6 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

March 5, 2007

Viva Piñata (TV series) - Badly written, needs markup and source links. -- treelo _talk 18:33, 5 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Cleaned up grammer a little, but I didn't want to touch it much because I know nothing on the subject. --postofficebox

Precompiled header - Needs a grammar check, I would clean it up now, but it's a bit early in the morning for me. --Roguelazer 09:03, 5 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I cleaned up the grammar, but the page still needs a C++ expert's attention. -- ObtuseAngle 15:52, 5 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Grammar corrections concerning some topics I know, but the page still needs C++ experts' revision. -- Rjgodoy 13:27, 8 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

March 4, 2007

Thai_lunar_calendar - Has a lot of confusing formatting.
Jamie Sweeney - Article is messy, cleaned it up a bit but needs more work.
Sathya Sai Baba movement - Possibly many problems with the article. The only serious contributor to the article (user:Andries) is or will be banned by the Wikipedia:arbitration committee. See talk:Sathya Sai Baba movement for a description of the possible problems. Andries 19:43, 4 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Animal cell article: needs more info, I was looking up information for my science test tomorrow and there was only the definitions of the three main parts of the cell.

Much more information can be found at human cells. --Andries 19:28, 5 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Ranger's Apprentice (series) - Requires checking of detail, an info bar, a table of contents, locations, cleanup of messy character section, and better summary of the books.
Biotechnology - Needs a cleanup of the formatting and on the info. It is currently too messy and hard to retrieve information from...
Europa-Park - Added the Infobox, but will not format properly. Can somebody take a look and help out? Also the article is in need of some general reformatting to make it easier to read. Poeloq 21:56, 4 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

March 2, 2007

SS Standartenfuhrer Guenther Anhalt - Major revision! Wikified, checked accuracy, did some research. Need an expert: was this guy involved in the Wormhoudt massacre? He became a company commander in the involved battalion 18 days before the massacre. Fifth Rider 22:25, 2 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Article needs sources. Most of the sources for information in this article are probably in german. Seems ok otherwise. --Lendorien 15:07, 10 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Ruthenium (II) tris (bathophenantroline disulfonate) Can someone translate this into something approaching English? Jackiespeel 16:42, 2 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The introduction to this article provides insufficient context for those unfamiliar with the subject matter. (Rjgodoy 14:34, 3 March 2007 (UTC))[reply]

Hard for a layman to understand. Sourcing is wonky. Lacks an intro that breaks it down for the layman. --Lendorien 14:42, 10 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Killer_application #Selected applications for gaming consoles - The list is too large and many of the games are not noteworthy enough. The list is also too opinion based. -- Zomic_13 15:59, 2 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Agreed. Article lacks any sort of sourcing, though it looks like the list has been culled quite a bit. --Lendorien 17:29, 6 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

February 2007

February 26 - 28, 2007

The Bad Girls Club - Copyediting needed to fix grammatical and syntax errors. Overall organization needed. 24.22.210.14 19:10, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed some grammatical errors. --Akiramenai 06:55, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Jauhar - This article seems to have been patched together from other Wikipedia material and original work from a non-native English speaker. Even if the grammatical errors were fixed, this article could still probably stand to be completely rewritten, referenced, and generally wikified. - Lukeonia1 09:10, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Fictional technology - This has a bit of editorializing about 19th c. England and 20th c. USA being "dominated by a military-industrial complex." The speculations about why specific technologies may not be appropriate technology are interesting but could stand to be reworded. --Kris Schnee 11:45, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Mars Hill Church - Read a little too informally and a little too much like an ad. Already did some cleanup, but could possibly use more. - raekwon 14:05, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Theodore Roosevelt, Jr. - Redundancy; awkward chronology; copyediting needed.

I did a lot of copyediting and rewording for clarity, and removed some redundant text. However, this still needs a look from someone familiar with the topic. --DoorsAjar 00:42, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Nautical tourism - Worthy topic, but needs a rewrite/expansion; unreferenced, not written in an encyclopedic style. - Mike Rosoft 11:14, 27 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Tony Hutchinson - Bad grammar and lots of broken links. Samx 20:08, 27 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Lexical knowledge - Currently orphaned, cites no references, and in need of encyclopedic style. WillHarper 00:14, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
MonoDevelop - The article's text seems to be lifted directly off the MonoDevelop website. Someone who is familiar with the software should probably clean it up. (I left a message on the talk page weeks ago, but no one noticed. I'm not using MonoDevelop so I really don't know anything about it.)Ubuntu Dude 00:47, 27 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Libertà condizionata - Same as above. Both articles were created by the same user, and are plagued with basic structural problems. Appears to be talking about the parole system in Italy - someone with knowledge of that would have an easier time cleaning this up. -Cue the Strings 17:23, 26 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
WPYA - Poor formatting
Sexy prime - very confusing, as there are several "as of" statements referring to different dates, yet all are written in the present tense. - Im.a.lumberjack 21:59, 24 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Armenian Genocide - The references in this article are a mess. I could really use some help fixing them. A ecis^Brievenbus 23:00, 24 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Tom Monaghan - This article has a severe lack of references, and have some NPOV issues as well. --Kristjan Wager 13:09, 23 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Adult Theater - Needs lots of cleanup, including fixing references etc Rtcoles 21:09, 23 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Rupert Lowe This article has a lot of information, but it is poorly structured. The tone is too conversational and there are numerous uncited POV assertions.+
The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock - i put in a cleanup-remainder tag about halfway through the article. The first half of the article is good, but the second half needs a grammar, spelling, and style check, along with wikification. - Im.a.lumberjack 23:44, 22 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Mariavite Church thorough/comprehensive but slightly POV/over-favourable. Jackiespeel 17:07, 21 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

February 16 - 20, 2007

RMI-IIOP It assumes too much background knowledge. It has no general discussion about what this protocol is, what various forms it takes, what it's used for, it's history, etc. I already know a little bit about them and use them but came here to learn something more and went away without the info I was looking for. Dougher 04:27, 20 February 2007 (UTC)
Web crawler - This page appears to have been purposefully defamed. AarrowOM 15:49, 20 February 2007
Geophagy - Screwy formatting and wikification, and an over-emphasis on cultural issues at the expense of medical content.
Muv-Luv - This article is written in a very confusing way. The character information appears to be the central feature rather than the main story itself. Apparently, the information came from a Japanese source, so it needs a cleanup to meet up the standards of an article written in English. Thank you, Minako-Chan* 14:37, 18 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Hoodlums (Rayman) - someone recently added a load of information which is not found in game, and did not give a source. The additions are rather poorly written and have an informal tone (some of it is grammatically incorrect, too) RobbieG 21:29, 17 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Shaba I - Article appears to include a lot of good information, but I can't make head or tail of it. It has been tagged for a short while. J Milburn 22:37, 17 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I provided a proper intro. Lacks sourcing. Could use some expansion, maybe some tonal edits. --Lendorien 18:29, 12 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The Hideout - Poorly written, seems more appropriate for a fansite than Wikipedia -- pb30<c.t> 03:49, 17 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

February 11 - 15, 2007

Music of Namibia - Section mentioning Ras Sheehama needs cleanup. goldenband
Fourier optics - This is an important topic, but it has a description which is utterly confusing for the layman. Definitely needs to be rewritten. Tagged for Confusing. --Lendorien 20:00, 14 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Wham! - Needs grammar, punctuation, complete sentence help, as well as sources.

Cleaned up grammar/punctuation/sentence structure, but the article needs thorough referencing.akronpow 20:10, 15 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Lysine - Requires much reworking including sources/verification, conforming to wiki standards, etc.
Special:Linksearch/media In articles: often incorrectly linked images. In other namespaces: generally no problem. - User:Docu
Casey Affleck - Needs alot of work, wikifying, spell check, grammar check source and information verification, etc. Im.a.lumberjack 23:18, 13 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Copy-edited, but still needs information verification. easyer 01:17, 22 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

February 6 - 10, 2007

Marques Houston - Poorly written in terms of the English, and just doesn't read like an encyclopedic article. First section looks like an overview, and just generally looks untidy. Also not inparticularly thorough and has some formatting issues. Also uses the term "sophomore" a lot which I think is outlawed by the Manual of Style (due to it not being used outside of the US and Canada). Esteffect 18:28, 10 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Frank Stanford - ~~Article has no headings~~ and needs citations and references. -Cavykatie

Headings have been added. Citations and references still need to be added, though. ChocoTenshi 01:03, 18 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Broken Sky & Broken Sky Characters - Need to be a lot more thorough. - Unsigned use
Galactic North & Revelation Space - Both unfinished and need to be completed. Not all the stories in Galactic north are even in the article.

February 1 - 5, 2007

Political communications - Needs a more worldwide worldview; Sources. -- Martpol 13:14, 5 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
William Poole (American 19th cent. NYC bully or gangster) - Lead section is two graphics, the rest is a data dump of contemporary journalism.--Jerzy•t
Gaia Online - Entry is very biased, and has been edited for malicious purposes.
Religion and politics - First section does not belong: some of the other entries could be separated out as stubs or longer. Jackiespeel 14:59, 2 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
New Zealand local body elections 2004 - has a list of the winner of one mayoral election, and one ward result, and the rest is a list of councils. - Kripto 22:57, 1 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

January 2007

January 25 - 31, 2007

Husky Rescue - Reads like an ad or a press release. It's not clear if the subject passes WP:MUSIC. A ecis^Brievenbus 13:43, 31 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Garcia de Nodal expedition - Tagged for cleanup due to: run-on sentences; awkward wording; inconsistent capitalization; needs more references. --TRosenbaum 15:06, 30 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Iberian Lynx - Needs proper sourcing. Other issues have been resolved. --Francisco Valverde 18:56, 30 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Readability test - no structure, needs to be wikified. Tygartl1 18:16, 29 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
eminent domain - This will require a lot of work. Some issues listed in "talk" page, including general wikification, better citation, restructuring, and reduction of legalistic jargon. -Pete 23:56, 29 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
John M. Bennett. Problems with this page: Wordart needs a disambiguation page. Pictures should be properly sized and placed. Jameswiese's additions, though well-meaning, should be modified to fit the writing of the page and the general tone required by Wikipedia.

January 21 - 25, 2007

Los Angeles News Service - Article needs to be rewritten in a more consise style, with headings and proper sourcing. I've made some attempt to clean it up. There's some personal info in there about the founders. Not sure it's appropriate for the article, but the founder's article was merged with this one some time back. --Lendorien 14:41, 25 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Romance novel - This article is a little confusing - it has no introduction and kind of just jumps into some bulleted points. I'd clean it up myself but I'm not really qualified to write a good introduction to an established article in this area CredoFromStart 20:21, 24 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Bat Boy: The Musical - This article is ridiculously convoluted in its Synopsis section. It jumps in an incredibly confusing and distracting way, and in certain regions it plagiarizes directly from the blurb of the book. And frankly, being an ex-actor in this musical, I frankly don't think I'm objective enough to rewrite this. Also, might want to keep an eye on the Controversy and External Links -- far too many high schools have been advertising in there. Ryoji.kun 04:31, 25 January 2007
Psychological warfare- Poorly written, reads like a bad high school paper. Tagged this as suggested on the talk page.
Dumba - Looks like a vanity page, little encyclopedic content. Needs severe pruning. - Mike Rosoft 16:56, 23 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Alex Rackley - reads like a poorly written newspaper article; needs grammar correction and general cleanup. --Matthew K 03:36, 24 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Green Politics - needs a complete makeover
Allu Arjun - needs almost complete rewrite - reads like a vanity article at this time. V i r tualSteve 10:29, 22 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Comet (passenger car) — Format is highly unlike encyclopedic content; article reads like a school essay. Tone is highly informal; language is imprecise; descriptors of varieties of names for railcars cited in article are incomplete and sometimes misapplied.
Cyber-bullying - Badly in need of overhaul in every sense. Needs more valid, verifiable information. Lacks citations, what citations it has relate to single source, which, while valid enough, risks POV. -- Zeraeph 13:46, 21 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Muraqabah - Doesn't use sections, is a guide on meditating or something (possibly shouldn't be in Wikipedia?), I'm not also sure this is WP:N. Maybe someone should nominate it for deletion, but at the very least it needs substantial work. --SLi 19:08, 21 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

January 6 - 20, 2007

Risk society - Doesn't read like a wikipedia article. Possibly copied from somewhere. 87.127.73.65 02:19, 20 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Nat Tarnopol - Either an unwikified textdump or perhaps a copyvio. A ecis^Bravado 19:33, 18 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The article on Drew Brees, New Orleans Quarterback, needed revision. Someone posted inapporiate comments. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 75.128.195.154 (talk • contribs)
List of collegiate secret societies - this list needs standards to prevent sprawl, see discusion for proposed guidelines. -- 2afterblue 14:50, 16 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Sweet Tooth (Twisted Metal) - this article is badly in need of a rewrite. -- Tygartl1 02:41, 16 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
SEIKIMA-II - This needs a huge cleanup. Albums need their own pages and should be removed from band's page. Additional info needs to be given on the band as well, as there is currently no background information there. -- Doberman Pharaoh 03:27, 16 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Comstock Music Festivals need to be fleshed out, especially citing numbers of attendees, organizing the bands by year/festival, and creating more links. User: bmoorewiki 2:52 CST
Interlochen Arts Camp Unorganized and confusing. This page has been nearly destroyed by unreverted vandalisms and POV edits. The list of Notable alumni is especially bad. Interlochen Arts Camp section need Wikifying. S.dedalus 21:33, 11 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Water cannon - No references. --RedHillian 04:21, 8 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

January 1 - 5, 2007

Early IBM disk storage - The article's tone needs improvement. Article refers to the reader, and it recommends doing a calculation in the first paragraph rather than providing data. Voket 23:02, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Argan - Most of this reads like somebody's high school term paper. It contains some awkward colloquialisms, and although it has some sources, they aren't all properly cited. Freshyill 14:20, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Special Assessment Tax (mistakenly created at First article) - unwikified, possibly copied from somewhere. - Mike Rosoft 22:38, 4 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Yellow Pages - other countries and regions section needs to be cleaned up re. URLs, layout and general content.
Notting Hill - poorly structured and hard to read. Needs internal sectioning. -- Earle Martin [^t/_c] 16:36, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Article now is acceptable, but lacks sources. --Lendorien 18:21, 28 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Zygosity - A mess. jkhjkSomeone has combined three reasonable articles into one strange amalgam, using copy & paste rather than merging histories. This needs someone to right the wrongs who also knows enough of the science to know what they're doing. --Grutness...wha? 01:03, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Still unresolved. Needs EXPERT who knows the subject to sort it out. --Lendorien 20:00, 11 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Cooperative and others (many here, notably Co-operative economics and Co-operative Federalism/Cooperative federalism mess) - Mixed usage in text within most of those articles (cooperative versus co-operative) and mixed usage between articles makes for confusing in-text links. This would require someone with admin powers to complete some of the needed moves, but otherwise it just needs someone with a lot of time to comb through and correct the spellings to how the article is titled. Gave me a migraine. Buona fortuna! --Rkitko 08:10, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

2006

December 2006

December 16-21

Airsoft-This has been tagged for a while, but was never added to the list. Most of the cleanup needed deals with style and tone. 65.197.192.130 23:41, 20 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Gretchen Wilson-The personal life section of the entry jumps around a lot and needs a rewrite for better flow.
Art criticism - the article is awful: badly written, non-encyclopedic, and extremely limited in scope. Seems like a topic worthy of some serious attention. 68.165.23.73 01:13, 31 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Imagekind - Originally read like an ad but has made progress, though I think it still needs some work to conform to WP:STYLE. JRHorse 14:23, 29 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Cha-cha-cha Single 'History' section collapses into an awkwardly-written description of the basic cha-cha-cha steps. --Yggdrasil 08:21, 28 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Comte de Lautreamont This article was totally rewritten in essay style with many mistakes in grammar, tone, etc. In addition, the objective tone was destroyed and added information was unsourced and repetitive.
Dresden This needs grammar help and some rewriting, particularly in the Statistics section Lcarscad 16:52, 27 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Considerably cleaned up now, for grammar/syntax/typos/spelling, style, tone of voice, etc. but still is missing a lot of sources and I think also a bit repetitive. Could probably be boiled down a bit.Woblosch 00:06, 30 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Indian National League - I did what I could with it. It needs someone who knows something about politics and political parties in India. Tygartl1 22:38, 27 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Desperate Housewives has many grammar mistakes, unsourced statements and speculation on future episodes. Season overviews also list many unnecessary details and could be shortened. Sfufan2005 22:10, 23 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Ghosthunter has a lot of spelling and grammatical problems. Just needs someone to clean it up thats actually played the game, as many of the issues are in the plot section. Galactor213 00:49, 24 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Colin Moss has a lot of repeating info. Might need some re-organization. Tygartl1 21:17, 21 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Hyperdispensationalism - This article on a Christian doctrine has recently had a lengthy correction posted as a personal note rather than a proper edit. --Yggdrasil 00:14, 21 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Minnesota Vikings - The "2006" section contains numerous stylistic errors and grade-school level English. --Action Jackson IV 09:45, 21 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I made style changes to be more consistent with the other sections of the MN Vikings article, but it's my first edit of a WP site, so please feel free to provide feedback.

Much of the stylistic problems are gone, but the article needs sources. --Lendorien 14:10, 10 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Celadon (color) - Needs history on Western use, a better hex colour, and alternate meanings removed. Phil.andy.graves 05:07, 16 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Richmond High School (Richmond, Indiana) - Alumni listed are not graduates of school; factual cleanup needed.

December 1-15

Texas United States House elections, 2006 - This article needs to be brought up to date. --Xerxes855 05:27, 13 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Started work on this, copied in election boxes I could find, will get onto the rest soon.

Abd al Hamid Ben Badis - This article is completely messed up, compared to the French and Arabic version of the article. -Escondites 05:29, 11 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Alan Walker (musicologist) - This is a well sourced article that could use some cosmetic formatting improvements. It is currently rated as a 'B' held back from 'GA' only by formatting. Please assist. Alan.ca 10:29, 11 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
AMC and Jeep transmissions - Needs heavy wikifying and a major cleanup. --ApolloBoy 00:57, 11 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Safety climate - created by WP:AFC request; don't have time to fix it

I propose that safety climate and safety culture be merged, as they appear to be very similar concepts, perhaps one being the European and the other the American terms for in effect the idea. timtregenza 07:19, 10 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

SameGame - a bit too casual compared to Wikipedia standards
The Da Vinci Code (film) - the Differences between film and novel section has been tagged for cleanup since October 2006, but it doesn't appear to have been entered on this page. The list is extremely long and needs some serious work. Betaeleven 14:31, 6 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
My Parents are Aliens - Specifically the episode synopses. Not all the series are formatted the same way, it's been tagged for non-standard English, and some of the grammar and spelling is quite poor as well. More alarmingly, I found some plagiarism in the characters section, (and replaced it), and I'm concerned that the synopses might contain some as well. RobbieG 16:49, 6 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
2000 NHL Entry Draft - Round 2 to 9 need to be properly formatted. A ecis ^{Dancing to electro-pop like a robot from 1984.} 13:51, 4 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
United States Copyright Law - Organizational issues as well as lack of detail on critical components and excessive detail on minor issues; for more info see Talk page. LH 23:10, 2 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Sholiyar, newly created article by new user needs some work, to put it generously. ॐ Priyanath 05:04, 2 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Samuel Colt - has no structure and makes references to things that are never mentioned. Not very clear to someone unfamiliar with the subject. 70.170.27.119 16:55, 2 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

November 2006

November 16 - 30

Powersgaming - Looks like a fairly notable gaming group, but most of the contents doesn't seem to be very encyclopaedic. - Mike Rosoft 13:35, 30 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Ashe County, North Carolina - General spelling, formatting and syntax problems, someone with local knowledge would be useful. RHB 20:06, 30 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Have done some grammatical editing. Still has no citations whatsoever.Monocle1 19:06, 1 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Travis S Taylor - Article sounded like fan-speak, I have made some changes to the tone but some sections still lack citations. Metlin 18:51, 28 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Multi-agent_system - The article lacks a general description. There should be a long general description of MAS, and a short concrete example (not the other way round, as it is now) --JFromm 13:20, 27 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Persepolis - A lot of good info here on one of the ancient world's most important cities, but it reads like it was written by someone who spoke a primary language other than English. The introduction is strong, but then it goes downhill. Lots of grammar and punctuation issues and some really weird syntax. Also, zero references. Dppowell 05:37, 27 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Did some copyediting. Still has issues that I can't fix, mostly due to lack of familiarity with the subject and the fact that it was probably written by someone with English as a 2nd Language. I'm not familiar with the subject so someone else more familiar with ancient persia probably needs to look it over. Also, it needs citations desperately. There's a good start on a solid article here, but it needs more work.--Lendorien 00:46, 29 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

History of Cuba - Cuban Rebels section has seemingly random information, and needs fluidity. Its kind of a mess, really. G.bargsnaffle 19:42, 24 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Chinese language - Many sections are disorganised and do not conform to the language template recommended by the Wikiproject of Languages. Also, subsections are misplaced, such as loanwords, which shouldn't be listed under morphology and the content is quite difficult to read. Another discrepany is when you search for Sinitic languages, it redirects you to the Spoken Chinese entry; however, when you type Chinese languages, it brings you to Chinese language. The section on Chinese characters is still unnecessarily long even though there is already a detailed article on Chinese characters. And the whole entry is just too long, it is 57kb in size, some of the clumsier sections should be rewritten for sub-articles. I do not understand how this article managed to become a featured article before, or maybe it was much better. Please contact me if anyone would like to work together on this Shingrila 05:18, 24 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Alice Academy - Information on the article, mostly on the characters are very confusing... -210.213.159.187
Aureal Semiconductor - Minor punctuation, typo, and grammar issues. At least one "editing comment" appears in the body. Structure could use a cleanup. --Dan Hendricks 02:32, 23 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Xine - Needs references for the "DVD Issues" section.
Forest_School,_Horsham - indiscrimate and redundant listing of everything associated with the school 19:37, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
Rashied Ali - Currently a mess of unsourced, unformatted articles, including one in French (???). I didn't want to revert back to a stub, and I suspect there may some useful information in there, but I don't have time to read through a dozen pages to find it.

Reverting back to last clean version, as it's a blatant copyright violation of http://www.bigmagic.com/bios/rashied.htm Patstuart^{(talk)(contribs)} 04:35, 21 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Paravas - I have been editing this page for style and general cleanup. This page also needs citations and some consolidation of information that is repeated in the article in different places. I am continuing to work on this article but I think it will benefit from multiple hands.Dalassa 13:24, 20 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Hornsby Girls' High School - Reads like a school magazine --Princess Tiswas 13:15, 17 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I gave it a copy edit and deleted the more obvious puffery and POV. Unfortunately the school's website is so poorly designed for non-Australians not connected with the school, it would take a braver person than I to wade through it looking for information. I hope a student of the school will take this on, and invited that. Accounting4Taste 22:03, 21 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Pot Noodle - Reads like advertising and appears to violate WP:CORP--Princess Tiswas 17:26, 16 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Heinrich_Schliemann Nothing too serious here, just needs a stylistic edit to read more like an encyclopedia entry and less like a magazine.

November 1 - 15

St._Bartholomew's_School - Needs general spelling and grammar cleanup. Some of the text is also perhaps too trivial and irrelevant for inclusion on Wikipedia. I-hunter 16:09, 15 November 2006 (UTC) -- SkierRMH 11:32, 18 November 2006 (UTC). Spelling and grammer have been cleaned up.Note quote under history section is in Old English of 1466. Kathleen.wright5 04:50, 9 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Park - For such a common topic, the article seems to jump around with many small sections and doesn't present much information. It also seems to be poorly worded, particularly in the "national park" section. I cleaned up a bit, but it needs some work. Jdoty 02:12, 15 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Article is pretty good now. Needs sources. --Lendorien 14:05, 1 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Locus of control is grammatically poor (the plural of locus is loci), incorrectly uses terminology (says that people are internal/external loci, when instead it should be that they *have* internal/external loci), doesn't cite it's sources (source that women tend to have external loci more than men?), and needs major paragraph reformatting. Tarayani 02:50, 13 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
History of IBM needs a rewrite, for the reasons I give on its talk page. Thomas Ash 16:29, 11 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Scaler needs a more informative outlook. Stot 20:13, 11 November 2006

This article needs work. It lacks formal tone, lacks normal information for inclusion in a game article and needs sourcing. --Lendorien 08:26, 6 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

ZigBee is starting to read like a bunch of ad copy for vendors. --MountainLogic 20:14, 10 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Article (especially in the introduction) needs to be rewritten to make it more accessable to the layman. No-one but major computer geeks will ever really know what the heck it's talking about as it currently stands. I can't help because I'm one of the laymen.--Lendorien 23:32, 6 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Malaric not a horrible mess but not nearly adequate Devotchka 03:05, 9 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Is a serviceable stub at the moment, but needs sourcing. --Lendorien 08:22, 6 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Jedediah Smith This is a mess all of the information is pretty much just made up to be a joke, the article talks about hot pockets, sasquatches and wizards. Please fix. 68.207.117.147 04:41, 7 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Article seems to have been vandalized; I have fixed what I could find. Can the rest of the contents - most of which has been added in this series of edits - be verified? - Mike Rosoft 13:04, 7 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Mizu ni Sumu Hana is just a confusing mess. I tried to fix it myself but since I don't know anything about the series, I cannot do it accurately. What does "Rikka is hospitalized but when she finally leaves the hospital she can't move on from the trauma because she is continuously attacked in several bizarre ways involving water" mean?? Even if I can fix the grammar I can't really explain what the series is about. Devotchka 01:28, 6 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
England national basketball team - This page has some problems. There are several places with poor grammar, and some of it seems to have been directly copied. -- Discboy 02:35, 5 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Henry Ward Beecher - The article is just a continuous stream of quotes from sources, and is therefore extremely disjointed. Anchoress 03:54, 5 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I've done a few things here and there in this article. Still needs work. The same two sources are quoted repeatedly for almost the entire article. --Lendorien 09:55, 5 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

October 2006

Reverse mortgage has a tag saying that it's been labeled for cleanup since October 2006. I've worked on it but it still needs a good bit of help (mostly citations and a look from someone who understands the topic better than I do), so I'm sliding it back into the queue.--edi 06:08, 7 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]
List of PlayStation 1 games - needs references for every game listed. Each game is also missing the entries for it's developer, publisher, and release date. Ceros 02:59, 30 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Word Of Life - Probably needs some content checking for POV and nuetrality. Also need sources. --Lendorien 22:41, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
History of the United States (1988–present) - This article needs more external sourcing. It also has some formatting errors (including overlap at the bottom of the page). This article should also include a little more information about this time period (demographic trends, economic trends, important issues, etc ((which can possibly become separate articles in the future)) ) 5ptcalvinist ^T.u.L.i.P
Podiatrist Introduction is not bad, but the rest of the article needs a lot of work. The sections for the various countries are particularly hard to follow and repetitive, and have no wiki markup. The list of conditions(?) also seems unnecessary, although some items could be incorporated into a more informative section on the work of a Podiatrist. I also get the feeling, from many parts of the article, that the text has just been copied from another source. —anskas 23:05, 27 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

This issues remain outstanding. The article is still in need of editing and wikifying. It seems to jump around a bit and doesn't flow very well at all. I would do it myself, but I don't feel comfortable with my lack of knowledge of the subject. --Lendorien 16:10, 7 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Futures exchange - is extremely confusing; I've taken macroeconomics (and garnered a 4.0, harrumph), always read the newspaper, and was totally confused about this article. It needs a good one-over by an economist. I posted it in the Business and Economics Wikiproject. hopefully someone will take a look at it.
Medical technologist Needs work, and proofreading as well as possible reorgainzation of the information. There is lots of unsupported information that needs to have references cited. Also the list of external links is completely ridiculous and needs desperately to be culled. --edi 14:47, 18 March 2007 (UTC) & --Lendorien 22:30, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Religion and politics - I started this a while ago when the Christianity and politics page was created: it now needs some tidying up or possibly separate pages for particular religions. Jackiespeel 17:12, 16 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
St. Johnsbury Academy - Requires rewriting, possibly some content cut. notability issues as well as a lack of sources. Rajrajmarley 19:28, 14 October 2006 (UTC) & --Lendorien 22:41, 27 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Igarassu - Needs verification and sources. --Lendorien 01:00, 6 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Inocente de Ti - looks like copyvio. Not encyclopedic. Very long plot synopsis, long list of credits and very badly formatted. Mona-Lynn 06:38, 11 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

September 2006

A1 Team USA - The article reads as if it was written by a pr company. I've edited the Background Story section [1], but the rest of the article also needs a lot of attention. Aecis ^{I'm too busy acting like I'm not naive} 10:51, 30 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
System Accident - This article needs to be totally rewritten. shotwell 02:38, 1 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Portuguese Rink Hockey Cup - Is the rest of the table needed? There seems not much point in it, when only the winners have been recorded - Weebiloobil 16:47, 29 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Peter Bruff article needs references. Currently has none. --MPW 03:12, 30 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Infantry tactics may not represent a neutral worldview. Some assertions are not supported with detailed references. The introduction is vague and needs to be expanded.
King Piccolo Saga - It's inconsistent in terms of grammar, tense, and style, and reads as though a lot of it was taken from a random fan site on the internet. 68.39.249.165 07:26, 23 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Communication - Very poorly written, and may need expert attention on the subject.

There appears to be active discussion on this subject, but they lack guidance of how to organize the article. I think it would really help if someone knowledgable in general article organization could step in and offer advice. --Lendorien 19:57, 1 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Folk high school - especially the France part is in very bad shape, almost incomprehensible. --Espoo 00:24, 18 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Richard Sorge - disorganized, confusing, and poorly written User:Msvarley
Rights of Man The article is extremely cluttered and lacking of any sources. It could be divided into subsections and some parts removed or merged into other wikipedia articles.

Took a first pass, there needs to be more done though. Sunspeck 06:10, 22 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

A little better than it was orginally, but it still needs some work to make it more coherant. The various sections do not segway into one another very well. I would work on it, but I'm not very knowledgeable about the subject. --Lendorien 19:27, 3 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Magnetic moment - There's a problem here and elsewhere with "magnetic poles," which are discussed as if they were magnetic monopoles. The magnetic moment is first defined as the pole strength times the separation. The correct definition (current times area) is given later in the article, but the earlier reference to poles is both confusing and wrong. The initial discussion of diamagnetism on this page is also confusing. --Bjheiden, 11:25 PM (EDT), 13 September 2006
Egyptian burial - Poor grammar in several sections, and the section on The Indestructibles completely neglects the precession of the equinoxes, although the full article on the indestructibles is a bit more informative.

have tried the obvious grammar/spelling/undisclosed conspiracy theories, but needs the attention of an Egyptologist (amateur or otherwise) to be truly cleaned. --Callix 12:11, 27 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Delta Upsilon - Not scholarly at all, trivial paragraphs, needs to be seriously worked on. Reads like it was copied from a fraternity brochure.

August 2006

John Stafford (US politician)(born abt 1940, military lawyer)- No sense, no chrono flow, excessive admiration, PoV about how he almost stopped Vietnam War & unverifiable & PoV "faithful Catholic". Continue wikification.Jerzy•t

Much cleanup has been done since first posted. It still needs sourcing overall. --Lendorien 20:09, 23 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Magnetosphere particle motion - has a discursive conversational physics textbook style, not an encyclopedia article style. -dmmaus 01:22, 16 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I cleaned this up a bit, is it satisfactory? Thomas Yen 13:37, 10 June 2007 (UTC)Thomasyen[reply]
Seems to be much better so I've taken the warning tag offBorisshah 14:55, 1 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Floating point - this article is very scrappy and poorly organized. -- Earle Martin [^t/_c] 13:34, 14 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Spring Waltz - This article seems like original research with a lot of subjective comments in it that need to be weeded out. The introduction needs to be expanded to include a very brief overview of the series. --Lendorien 16:56, 21 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Wari' - Tone & level of detail are inconsistent (& frequently odd); crucial information confusing or missing; no citations. Details of recommended cleanup are posted on the Talk page. --Vcrs 08:29, 3 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Appears much improved, but still needs work. Espeically sources, some tone work and wikifying. --Lendorien 18:01, 20 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

July 2006

Kyunki Saas Bhi Kabhi Bahu Thi - This article is too long and in places badly written - perhaps it should be split into several articles
Mohammad Nabi Mohammadi - Needs some work by someone knowledgable in Afghani history and politics. --Lendorien
Assiti Shards series - It has NOR issues as well as overall poor-quality writing and strikes me as fancruft, particularly the "The Assiti mechanism literary vehicle" section. -- Earle Martin [^t/_c] 11:51, 22 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Superman in popular music - It is an almost incomprehensible mess, with no organization or flow.Rhindle The Red 12:43, 19 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Elections in 2004 - This page does not conform to the other ways in which the other election pages have been compiled a lot of work is required on this page to bring it up to scratch--Lucy-marie 12:50, 19 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Pancharatna Kritis - Needs to be moved to Wikisource, or rewritten in a more encyclopedic style. --Siva 20:04, 17 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Waste minimisation- Article has spelling and grammar issues, confusing, lack of context, uses lots of big words that explain little and just generally needs help. Needs someone whith knowledge of the subject to look it over. It currently has 8 tags on it. Ouch. --Lendorien 22:58, 15 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The article now has 5 tags (3 tags less than it org. had, still needs more information, however)! -- ElliotThomas 16:00, 15 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Cook Islands Maori does not conform to the standards of other language articles; talk about what Ethnologue describes as multiple languages. Mo-Al 17:06, 14 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Teaching English as a Foreign Language - No category, smells like SPAM, needs attention and expansion... also wikify to other see also topics.

This article's content is convoluted with that of English_as_a_Second_Language

Polish Catholic Church - A Polish wikipedian on February 25th, 2007 did some translation. He did not do all of the text, but a significant part was taken care of. Some additional translation of the portions near the end after the fall of communism would be useful to round out the article as it currently ends in 1951. Sources needed as well. --Lendorien 23:15, 1 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Copy-edited the (English) article today for grammar and clarity. ThisIsAce 19:18, 13 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Nomad - This entry gives the impression that nomadism and pastoralism are the same thing. Pastoralism or animal husbandry is a subsistence method, and nomadism is not, although the term is sometimes used as shorthand for pastoralism. However, any society which does not remain sedentary for a significant length of time is considered nomadic. This includes most hunter-gatherers, but the entry makes no indication of this. Also there is no logical organization of the information that is presented. An expert's contribution would be best.--LC | Talk 22:52, 9 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

This article still needs expert attention. Article has seen significant improvement in the past couple months. It consists mainly of lists now. --Lendorien 17:41, 2 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Sukyo Mahikari - Religious article needs thorough cleanup to make encyclopedic (particularly, removal of extensive self-referential editorial comments). Tearlach 16:04, 9 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Some work done since originally posted here. Still has neutrality tag. Needs expert attention and review. --Lendorien 20:00, 15 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

2005

Virial theorem - The whole thing needs integrating with Virial coefficient and Virial expansion, as there'a lot of overlap. Not my cup of tea. Tearlach 03:16, 26 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Needs an expert or someone familiar with the subject to look this over and see if the issue is still outstanding. --Lendorien 16:18, 30 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Identity (social science) - the "Sociology and Political Theory" section is especially vague and confusing. Note some overlap with Cultural identity. --The Famous Movie Director 04:49, 22 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Karjalanpaisti (Carelian stew) - Needs to be reviewed by a cooking expert and also expanded, maybe into a wikipedia cookbook. --Thorri 12:33, 21 Oct 2005 (UTC)
Hibiscus (entertainer) - Lacks sources + has some tonal issues. Needs fact checking. Underground culture stub, may need an expert's attention. --Lendorien 23:18, 29 May 2007 (UTC) + Crova x 20:15, 21 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Jardin de Tivoli, Paris - the subject is interesting (history of Paris) ; it needs to be developed by an 'expert' with relevant information. Jpm2112 13:07, 20 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Chinatown patterns in North America - Section on gentrification needs major help, and there's only so much I can do as I don't fully understand the issue. - Sensor 22:22, 20 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Article lacks any sort of sourcing, makes references to demographics and trends and come soff as OR. Probably needs expert attention. --Lendorien 18:54, 29 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Arguments for and against drug prohibition - reads like a debate, some arguments are very weak e.g. The charge of "immorality" is subjective, and can be defined differently according to different perspectives and beliefs, all of which may be valid. Thus, with such conflicting views, a law based on "morality" cannot be fairly applied to any population. Needs to be gone over for NPOV, and probably merged somewhere. Pak aran 04:44, 18 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Seems to be fairly fair in its overview of arguments now. But there are serious sourcing issues. The article uses three different methods of sourcing. Needs to be converted to footnote intext references for entirety of article. --Lendorien 19:51, 27 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Citizens Electoral Council - glaring POV problems.--HK 20:57, 17 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

I did some cleanup of POV, but I don't really know much about Australian politics so I don't know how much of a help I am. It really needs someone with some knowledge about the topic. ryright 03:23, 6 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Added link to a possible source Danielspencer91 16:16, 29 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]