Talk:E-102 Gamma/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:04, 8 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll leave some initial comments within 24 hours. I will focus on copy editing issues and the sources too. I'll have a read through now anyway. Thanks, ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:04, 8 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:
It is well referenced.

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

Lead

"E-102 Gamma (E-102ガンマ Ī-Wan-Ō-Tsū Ganma?) is a fictional robotic character who primarily appears in the 1998 video game Sonic Adventure." - the lead starts off with saying that he (can I call a robot 'he'?) primarily appears in Sonic Adventure, did he appear in any more games/comics in the franchise?

I go into this more in the second paragraph. Basically, his entire canonical role is localized to Sonic Adventure, as he's created and dies within that game. However, he's a playable character in Sonic Shuffle, he's on collectibles in a couple other games, and there's a Sonic Battle character who looks a lot like him and other characters mistake for him. Tezero (talk) 19:37, 8 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"He has garnered mixed to positive comments from critics, who have praised his story and been more divided on his gameplay." - what were Gamma's negative reviews? What about his gameplay wasn't so well received from critics?

Done. Tezero (talk) 19:37, 8 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Other than this the lead meets the criteria as it summarises the article.

Design and characteristics

"While a robot, Gamma exhibits changes in morality—rebelling against Eggman[7]—and also forms a friendship with Amy Rose and experiences flashbacks of unpleasant events" - how about While a robot, Gamma exhibits changes in morality; rebelling against Eggman, forming a friendship with Amy Rose and experiencing flashbacks of unpleasant events. You don't have to use this, it's just a suggestions as there were too many 'ands' in one sentence it didn't make it sound too great?

Reworded similarly: like your suggestion, but better preserving grammatical agreement, I think. Tezero (talk) 19:37, 8 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

References

All references are in check and are reliable sources. I've checked them and they are all reliable magazines and official Sega sites. One reference is in Japanese, but can be translated so this shouldn't cause a problem.

On hold

There are very little problems with this article, the only issues I could find with it were a few copy editing issues. All references are reliable and in the right place, the lead almost meets the GA criteria and the Appearances and Reception sections both meet the criteria. I'll put this on hold for the standard seven days until those minor issues have been addressed. Thank you ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:36, 8 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Close - promoted

The whole article meets the GA criteria. The prose is excellent (clear to read and understand), every reference is reliable and the citations are in the correct place. The lead now meets the GA criteria too, as it summarises the whole article. It's as comprehensive as it can be for a character who only appears mainly in one game! Looks like another Sonic GA, well done. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 14:37, 9 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]