Talk:Mitsuki (Naruto)/GA1

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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 02:55, 23 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this article. Thank you. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 02:55, 23 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Wikilink "shoulder length bob" to Bob cut for readers who might not be aware of it at first glance.
"Boruto anime director Hiroyuki Yamashita commented on Mitsuki's part in the movie, saying that he was much more of a gentle character." — Would sound better if "movie were changed to "film".
"As well, after reading the character's own story, Yamashita felt that Mitsuki's image was solidified." — You can remove "as well". Just "After reading the character's own story, Yamashita felt that Mitsuki's image was solidified."
"Afterward, he remembered being praised by Masashi Kishimoto" — You already mentioned Kishimoto's name in full in the 1st paragraph of the section. Just "Kishimoto" will do.
"who said he is very honored to voice the character." — Is this sourced?

Yes, the source appears in the reference that is placed right after the next sentence. Flowerpiep (talk) 14:15, 24 March 2018 (UTC)Flowerpiep[reply]

"During the movie, the team takes part in the examination test" — Change "During the movie" to "In the film".
"Mitsuki confesses to Boruto and Sarada that he is the son of the criminal Orochimaru, shocking Sarada." — Why only Sarada? Why not Boruto?

Sarada was the only one shocked since only she had met Orochimaru previously (during the events of Naruto: The Seventh Hokage and the Scarlet Spring). Boruto was not shocked because he did not know who Orochimaru was (he asked who he was after the revelation about Mitsuki's parentage). Flowerpiep (talk) 14:15, 24 March 2018 (UTC)Flowerpiep[reply]

Wikilink "artificial human".

A neat little article, Tintor2. Resolve these comments and the article will be promoted. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 11:06, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review Ssven2. It looks like Flowerpiep already fixed the issues.Tintor2 (talk) 15:38, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Tintor2 and Flowerpiep The following comments are still unresolved:-

"Their teacher, Konohamaru Sarutobi, disappears while on an undercover mission, and Boruto, Sarada, and Mitsuki are sent to find him by their superiors." — This is unsourced, and remove "Konohamaru" as you already mentioned his name in full in the 1st paragraph of the section.
- Added the reference
"He was put to the test by Orochimaru, and another of his creations called Log (ログ Rogu), to determine his allegiance; Mitsuki decided to follow his own path as the "moon" instead of a vessel, setting out toward the Hidden Leaf to find his "sun" Boruto." — You mean that he and Log were tested? BTW, I don't quite get the "moon" and "sun" part. A little more elaboration and clarification on this would be needed.
- Trimming the section. The chapter is not that long.
"McNulty wrote that while his character was overshadowed by his teacher Shino Aburame" — Where does the Grouch who hardly laughs (save for one episode)/smiles (Shino) fit in all of a sudden?
- Tried fixing that. Hope it works.Tintor2 (talk) 16:03, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Looks the same to me, Tintor2. I just wanna know how did Shino become his teacher before Konohamaru. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 16:34, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Ssven2: I tried to make that part clearer. Shino is Mitsuki's teacher from the ninja academy, while Konohamaru is his team captain. Flowerpiep (talk) 16:53, 24 March 2018 (UTC)Flowerpiep[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
Pass or Fail:

Thank you for addressing the comments, Tintor2 and Flowerpiep. Congratulations, the article has passed. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 17:03, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Ssven2: Thank you for providing the review! @Tintor2: Great teamwork, as always! Flowerpiep (talk) 17:20, 24 March 2018 (UTC)Flowerpiep[reply]